Movies and televisions have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
All forms of entertainment class="have">have various class="effect">effect on people and society as a class="whole">whole. Therefore, they all class="have">have potential to lead certain consequences. personally, i believe class="that">that the effects of movies and television class="have">have more of postive sides class="than">than class="other">other way around. I feel this way for two main reasons, which i class="will">will explore in the following essay.
First of all, movies and televisions class="give">give a remotely distant experience to audiences class="that">that class="is">is not possible in real life and offer people a lesson. class="when">when class="you">you watch a movie, class="you">you class="have">have a chance to class="see">see different perspective from different angle. class="you">you class="will">will class="see">see class="that">that class="how">how class="bad">bad actions class="made">made by a class="bad">bad guy has a class="bad">bad outcome class="that">that class="will">will in the class="end">end affects the class="bad">bad guy and him to be defeated by a good guy. class="my">my friend's personal experience class="is">is a compelling example of this. class="when">when class="he">he was in middle class="school">school, class="he">he was class="such">such a bully class="that">that always bit weak and short kids in class="our">our class="school">school. I and class="whole">whole class didn't like him. class="he">he was constantly called to class="school">school office for his class="bad">bad behavior. but one day, class="our">our class went to a movie together. In the movie, a similar bully was depicted and showed class="how">how class="such">such behavior led to a tragic class="end">end. The bully from class="our">our class just shocked and seemed deeply regretted. After class="that">that movie class="he">he never bullied ever again. class="he">he actually become very exemplary student in class="our">our class="school">school and everyone befriended with him.
Secondly, television class="is">is a great source of knowledge and can help educational growth besides the internet. There are many programs and even channels for educated purposes class="such">such as Canadian da vinci channel and many class="other">other class="such">such channels are really helpful to kids for learning science and many class="other">other disciplines systematically. For instance, class="my">my younger brother class="is">is only five years old, but class="he">he knows big scientific topics like big bang, black hole, dark matter or even class="how">how drinking soda are class="made">made all thanks to da vinci channel. class="he">he has a dream of becoming a great scientist just like Einstein, Newton, and Heisenberg as him saying.
In conclusion, i am of the opinion class="that">that movies and television class="have">have more of benefits class="than">than draw backs for behavior of young people. this class="is">is because they class="give">give us an insight to experience from a different angle and perspective, and because they can teach and class="give">give us valueble information.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3670.0 1977.66487455 186% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 9.26767676768 4.8611393121 191% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 9.66336770703 2.67179642975 362% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563131313131 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 959.4 618.680645161 155% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.4 1.51630824373 158% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 29.0 9.59856630824 302% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 99.900280859 48.9658058833 204% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 166.818181818 100.406767564 166% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.09090909091 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0292354637899 0.236089414692 12% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.026284242024 0.076458572812 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412002870822 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0488417829405 0.150856017488 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0475267308766 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.2 11.7677419355 265% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -14.47 58.1214874552 -25% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.8 10.1575268817 195% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 36.19 10.9000537634 332% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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