Due to the technology booming after the industrialization,especially in agriculture area, the harvest of the corps has been increasing dramatically. Thus someone may assume this advatange would change the way people live. While I do not totally agree with this statement ,as we are considering the adavatange and lifstlye of the human beings, we should know there are still lots of starving people under the poverty line , also, as the difference varies in the whole world, I belive it is not a simple essay which we merely concentrate on a single clue. However, as a Chinese ,my country share a long history of food and starvation, I am very glad to share my view there in after.
First of all, the rapid development of scientific tech does provide people lots of convinience who live in major cities. As the time when my dad was a kid, he could eat an egg only on his birthday, poverty and starving were the common memory of the people with my dad's age. Nowadays as I want to keep fit, I can have two eggs each day. The time talks, the food is becoming more and more easier to be prepared. With adavancing cooking tools, we can make delicious food which was difficult to make, once I could not make duplings which seem to be the basic skill of a Chinese, now we have specific tools to cover the meat inside the flavor skin, I can make more dumplings in a short time. It is true the technology change the people's life, as the people like me wen to keep heathy body, the mixer is another great invention which can blend fruits and vegetables into smoothies.
Secondly, however, there are still lots of people in developing conutries who could not share the advantage of the technology. Still in China, especiall in the southwest of China, the people living in these undelveloped area still lack of essential electricity, let alone the food and the cooking development. As I was travelling in Gui Zhou, a mutil-ethic province in this area, with the beautiful scenery whicn untained by industialization, I found there were still lots of people who use kindle to light the room and use grease of pig, instead of the oil for cooking.The imbalance of regional development brings about many problems, the food is one major issue among them.
Thirdly, as the people are geting food easier than before, another international problems is in front of everyone of us. My dad experince the time with less food as he was young, also, he had a good time as many Chinese people shared, the thriving economy of China, thus people in China got lots of time and money on food. Unfortuanately, my dad got diabetes, the symptom would bring lots of subsequent problems on his body because of having extensive food each day. It is an international problem which boomed in China as the consequence of the development.
In all, I belive people should be aware of the convinice of prepareing the food while it is more important to know how to keep a good fit which need to constrain one's desires.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: , especially
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Suggestion: Thus,
...corps has been increasing dramatically. Thus someone may assume this advatange would...
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Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...me talks, the food is becoming more and more easier to be prepared. With adavancing cooking...
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... share the advantage of the technology. Still in China, especiall in the southwest of...
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Suggestion: one's
...keep a good fit which need to constrain ones desires.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, thus, while, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2457.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 526.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6711026616 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82996450995 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511406844106 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 787.5 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.8344325138 48.9658058833 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.5 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2222222222 20.6045352989 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181938006067 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060372115469 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527663781131 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0973744263501 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0228025111437 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.4 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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