As far as my concern, in part ,I do not agree with the issue that the educational institutions should encourage their students to study in the fields which could provide them more jobs. In that due to the different functions of education institutions, some of the colleges or universities are focusing on studying or researching in certain fileds which is not profitable even with a bright future of working oppurtunities. Thus I suggest a multi-level of educational institution system would benefit both the students and the sociery. I will address my views as follows.
To begin with, we should make clear of the education institution system. In general, there are two kinds in this system, one for teaching skills and the other for researching. In some universities this two kinds of institution could be in one campus due to the setting ups of the university. Thus some sutdent would find work easliy in that they are learned to make money like the major in cooking or building. While some students , on the other hand ,have to study hard and do well in the major to reaseach, possibly they would spend lots of years in labs even become a professor themselves at last.
Subsequently, we should make clear of the reason why we should study. As my concern, learning is a process to recognize oneself, the others and the society. Thus on the way of learning, we may find on ourself what we should do in the future. Some people may go to work early after the gradutaion because of the their recognition of therselves even join the army, while that are all their own choices. However, there are some students go on studying in their fileds without finding jobs, in the labs , the researching center. Maybe these jobs are not lucrative, while it is just this kind of diversifications in working that concsists the enterprises of everyone in this world. Hence, we could drink more favorable coffee by the cook as well as enjoy the development of new 5G techonolgy to surf the Internet. This is the point where I want to make, not all the students would enter the gates of Banks who would be ba professional analysists even bankers. Likewise, without the service from servers in different fileds like restarants or gyms, our life would be tedious and boring. So the education instituion should take the students' choice into account instead of inspiring them painstakingly to study in some majors that could be easier find jobs.
Moreover, if the institutions encourage their students to study in some promising majors, there would be a severe competition wating for them when they gradute. It is easy to imagine the situation the more students appliying for the jobs with limit occupaions. Like decades ago, mechanical engineering was very popular in the job market, while now due to the development of the socitey, the competition was becoming more conflict, meanwhile the reccession of the ecconomy could not take the economy in the construction or prodcution market. Thus the gradutes in this major suffuured a lot when they left the universities.
In all, I belive we should empahsize the diversity and the student;s interest instead of the job market.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, likewise, may, moreover, so, thus, well, while, in general, kind of, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2627.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 536.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90111940299 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8130734453 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481343283582 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 814.5 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.8609159214 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.458333333 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54166666667 5.21951772744 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191658191875 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0567803058588 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0505855461081 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119813930081 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.050496006927 0.0667264976115 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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