The number of people who are overweight is rising in Western society. Why is this the case? What can be done about it?
Overweigh becomes a serious problem for developed societies and calls for attention. The reasons for it can be the modern lifestyle and consumption of unhealthy food. However, there are some steps that we can carry out to stop the epidemy.
To begin with, the modern lifestyle includes reduced physical activity for people. By that I mean, many of us spend all the day behind a computer screen. Furthermore, after work the situation does not change much: we are being so tired that we are not able to do anything except sleeping or watching TV. As a result, an average person does not perform enough exercises to be fit. The unspent energy accumulates in our body in fats. Moreover, it is important to point out that lifestyle is not the only major factor. Eating patterns highly affects out weight also. To clarify, now people cook at home less frequently than before. In addition, the popularity of dangerous foods increased significantly. What I mean by foods here is fast food, pizza, products with large amount of fats and cancergenes. All of these make a contribution to obesity in Western countries. obese
Fortunately, we can try to solve the problem. First, we should try to increase the popularity of healthy lifestyle. This notion makes up for practicing sports and changing eating patterns. To make sports popular, governments have to provide everyone opportunities to practice sports that they prefer. This should be coupled with the propaganda of the active lifestyle. If both ways are excecuted, people will be more active that will lead to a decrease in the number of overweight persons. Moreover, the propaganda of natural products should exist as well. Humanity should pay more attention to what they eat. The focus should be moved to vegetables and healthy products. These things together can change the situation.
To summarize, these are major causes of overweight in developed countries. However, there are answers for those as well.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, well, i mean, in addition, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 30.3222958057 155% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1638.0 1373.03311258 119% => OK
No of words: 323.0 270.72406181 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07120743034 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74189117215 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 145.348785872 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597523219814 0.540411800872 111% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 419.366225166 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 13.0662251656 199% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 21.2450331126 56% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.3975166841 49.2860985944 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 63.0 110.228320801 57% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.4230769231 21.698381199 57% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.26923076923 7.06452816374 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 4.33554083885 254% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146300778811 0.272083759551 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0346257057442 0.0996497079465 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0377203628255 0.0662205650399 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0775752431044 0.162205337803 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037077086005 0.0443174109184 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 13.3589403974 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 53.8541721854 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.0289183223 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.24 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 63.6247240618 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.498013245 65% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.2008830022 62% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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