What famous place would you like to visit? Use details and reasons to support your response.
Disneyland is a place, which I would choose. The reasons for it is my admiration for Disney animation coupled with the strong desire to do it since middle school.
To begin with, the principal cause for my select of this spot is that I always wanted to do it. As soon as I reached primary school age, I got access to television. Watching of Disney cartoons became the favorite of my time spending. I have seen a countless number of them, and they made a strong impression on me. Thus, visiting Disneyland for me is like diving in my childhood. Moreover, I should point out that there are not large attraction parks in my city, yet my desire to attend one was huge. To be accurate, visit a small one would be a wonderful experience for me as well; however, there was not even a tiny attraction park in my town. So when I have heard about Disneyland that has all kinds of attraction and reproduces the atmosphere of my childhood, I immediately decide to visit the theme park as soon as possible.
What is more, besides reasons that caused by lack of attraction parks in my city or memories of childhood, I love Disney’s animation for these days. When I come from the work or study exhausted, I switch the television on and watch one of them. A portion of the good mood that I receive in watching this makes me think that the world is not as bad as it seems sometimes. What is more, people face injustice throughout their life, and sometimes we cannot manage it. If we take a look at cartoons, they always end happily, and evil is defeated in each of them. Maybe the world of animation is better than us, but the justice of animation helps me to overcome all the hardships that I face.
To summarize, I would select to visit Disneyland, for I like the cartons of this studio and just because of my desire to do it since a very early age.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, thus, well, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1509.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.41228070175 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59657848491 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535087719298 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3098926534 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.7647058824 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1176470588 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0981732058799 0.236089414692 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0350963324712 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454644001407 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0759680079522 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0273455425478 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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