The number of people who are overweight is rising in Western society. Why is this the case? What can be done about it?
Overweigh becomes a serious problem for developed societies and calls for attention. The reasons for it can be the modern lifestyle and consumption of unhealthy food. However, there are some steps that we can carry out to stop the epidemy.
To begin with, the modern lifestyle includes reduced physical activity for people. By that I mean, many of us spend all the day behind a computer screen. Furthermore, after work the situation does not change much: we are being so tired that we are not able to do anything except sleeping or watching TV. As a result, an average person does not perform enough exercises to be fit. The unspent energy accumulates in our body in fats. Moreover, it is important to point out that lifestyle is not the only major factor. Eating patterns highly affects out weight also. To clarify, now people cook at home less frequently than before. In addition, the popularity of dangerous foods increased significantly. What I mean by foods here is fast food, pizza, products with large amount of fats and cancergenes. All of these make a contribution to obesity in Western countries.
Fortunately, we can try to solve the problem. First, we should try to increase the popularity of healthy lifestyle. This notion makes up for practicing sports and changing eating patterns. To make sports popular, governments have to provide everyone opportunities to practice sports that they prefer. This should be coupled with the propaganda of the active lifestyle. If both ways are executed, people will be more active that will lead to a decrease in the number of overweight persons. Moreover, the propaganda of natural products should exist as well. Humanity should pay more attention to what they eat. The focus should be moved to vegetables and healthy products. These things together can change the situation.
To summarize, these are major causes of overweight in developed countries. However, there are answers for those as well.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, well, i mean, in addition, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1638.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08695652174 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74110152879 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.596273291925 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.5762642649 48.9658058833 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 63.0 100.406767564 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.3846153846 20.6045352989 60% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26923076923 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14680972688 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0348001119119 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378111727533 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0777633561735 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370011824633 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 58.1214874552 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.35 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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