Teenagers have an influential an tremendous impact on our societies. In fact, it is vitally important to start training our children to preparation for their adults lives and haw they should follow them in order for the best results to follow suits as they are the pillars and the power will guide our nation toward progress. When comes to the statement, some people may agree with the idea and give us sound reasons for their belief. On the other hand, some people might disagree and have different opinion. Also those opponent probably will provide us with puissant evidences to support their own beliefs. I am strongly agreed with the statement that people should encourage teenagers to take part-time job in order to help them prepare their adults lives, the reasons go as follow.
To begin with, work has an incontrovertible affects on everyone's ability, take a part-time job can encourage teenager have more activities and teach them efficiently schedule their own time. Nowadays, due to the revolutionary impact of new technology that has a spectacular breakthrough in our communities such as smartphones and tablets, that sometimes, will reflects negatively on teenagers daily activities. For instance, instead of playing in outdoor they will prefer playing computer games and check on their social network, this will create a toxic atmosphere on teenagers communication abilities and cause them do not like to have contact with others people.
Secondly, part-time job have a tremendous impact on our lives. For example, I used to be a introverted people, after I start to work as a part-timer waitress in a restaurants during my sophomore, I totally change my personality, I become more talkative because I have to communicate with customer and have conversation with my colleague every week and at the same time I am able to learn some business skill such as, how a restaurant set their price range and who is their target customer, this part-time job allowed me to learn many things and become superiority. Moreover, many studies which have been done by many universities in United Stated constantly stated that part-time job are able to help teenagers prepare their adults lives because it can help them learn a lot of things and become a better people, and many studied was studying about this subject. Finally, scholar prove the examination and this make be believe my experienced is correct for my life.
For all what have been discussed may finally draw a conclusion that says part-time can help teenager prepare their future life. This action can improve our social life. Other people opinions have right to believe. But my opinion and others people are overwhelmingly too much to be ignored.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 31, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
Teenagers have an influential an tremendous impact on our societies. In ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ht disagree and have different opinion. Also those opponent probably will provide us...
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Line 1, column 775, Rule ID: AS_FOLLOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'as follows'?
Suggestion: as follows
...pare their adults lives, the reasons go as follow. To begin with, work has an incont...
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Line 4, column 45, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...egin with, work has an incontrovertible affects on everyones ability, take a part-time ...
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'reflect'
Suggestion: reflect
...hones and tablets, that sometimes, will reflects negatively on teenagers daily activitie...
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Line 4, column 570, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teenagers'' or 'teenager's'?
Suggestion: teenagers'; teenager's
... this will create a toxic atmosphere on teenagers communication abilities and cause them ...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...on our lives. For example, I used to be a introverted people, after I start to wo...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a restaurant' or simply 'restaurants'?
Suggestion: a restaurant; restaurants
...art to work as a part-timer waitress in a restaurants during my sophomore, I totally change m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in fact, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2274.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08724832215 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77960042101 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532438478747 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 722.7 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 116.165464855 48.9658058833 237% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 133.764705882 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2941176471 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.11764705882 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371351384735 0.236089414692 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116392683083 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110173492809 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232032077546 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.023875604471 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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