One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them take a part time job
New researches state that one of the essential things for children is making them responsible for their duties. If the children do not learn responsibility from the younger ages, they cannot handle their critical challenges when they got older. Many people state that one of the main activities which parents most do to make their youngers more responsible is doing a job, even a part type. However, some others state that doing a job can distract them from other responsibilities, such as studying, and they should only do their school jobs. In my view, children should do a part-time job, and parents should encourage them to do that. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point is that children learn to manage their money and usually appreciate the money more by doing outside work. If parents gave them money without any constraint, the kids would spend their money in some inappropriate ways. For example, I have a friend named Navid, who has been working since he was a primary school student. Although his parents gave him enough money, he usually wanted to earn money by himself and considered it a challenge. Also, his parents encouraged him and usually advocated for him in his business. Now, Navid is a rich man, but he appreciating the money's value and do not waste it. He always states that I should not waste what I spent a lot of energy and time earning.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that making money and working is suitable for personality development. While the children work in an environment outside of their house, it usually helps them confront the challenges. He would be a person who many people, specifically his family, can rely on him. For instance, when my father was a student, he worked in the pistachio farms as a worker, though his father was a rich man. This matter made my father a man whom anyone can rely on him even his parents. The family members usually talk to my father about their problems, such as finances, and my father always advises them.
In conclusion, although it is a true statement that children must study, they should not only do this activity. They should accept some responsibility, and their parent should give them applause.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 577, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'appreciates'.
Suggestion: appreciates
...iness. Now, Navid is a rich man, but he appreciating the moneys value and do not waste it. H...
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Line 3, column 394, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t, he worked in the pistachio farms as a worker, though his father was a rich man...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1879.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83033419023 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64267602252 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526992287918 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 22.3434335979 48.9658058833 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.4761904762 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5238095238 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90476190476 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234175187334 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743923693135 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063688207242 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137108315407 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0641591915996 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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