Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Because the world is changing so quickly people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
In this new modern era, by developing the technology and communities changes are occurring faster than before. These fast changes have inevitable side effects which affects most of the world society. Many people state that due to these changes they are more unsatisfied than people who lived in the last centuries. However, some others believe that this statement is not true, and positive effects of the world's change is more than its negatives. This matter make controversial disputes between many people and critics. I agree with the first statement. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that by emerging media, specifically internet and television, people always compare each other with others' lifestyle, which most of them are fake. But people easy believe these advertisements because they don't know these statements are one of the main imperialism's aims to engage people to immigrate in their countries and work for them. For instance, the United States has a policy to attract people of other countries to move to the United States from 70's. The United States started to produce some movies and advertisements with beautiful actors and actresses who had nice and luxury lifestyles. These advertisements made new term in world society: American Dream. So, this term made a general believe in people that if a person reach the America would be a successful person and if not he is a failed person. Therefore, people who have not the ability to travel and immigrate to America are disenchanted because they think that they are failed people.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that world's fast change made some inevitable changes in human-being lifestyle. These changes make people depressed and unsatisfied. Technology development demands people's hard work, and hardworking made people more depressed. This issue would be more considerable if happens for all people, but this phenomenon merely involves part of society, who has less money and relations with powerful core of governments. This phenomena called new colonization, and has many critics. For instance, prosperous countries, such as the United States, force people in weak and not-developed countries to work for them and produce their productions by earning such low salaries. However, the United States native work less than other's due to their government’s power. This issue made people in weak countries more disappointed due to their hard working.
In conclusion, I think the world’s change disadvantages are more than its advantages and I guess this problem will causes many protests in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, therefore, for instance, i guess, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2259.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31529411765 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80760213666 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494117647059 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 710.1 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3209933537 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2173913043 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4782608696 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08695652174 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243785702375 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0768564602792 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459963203648 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148751979401 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0526105293346 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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