One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to
encourage them to take a part-time job.
In the modern era, the issue of whether or not parents allow children to do a part-time job for learning a skill that helps them in the future has a great deal of attention from psychologists and parents. Although some may say that children must spend their time to playing and studying lessons in adolescence; I, as well as many others, believe that doing a part-time job can help children to learn some abilities such as saving money, timetabling, and they will become a skilful person in the future.
First of all, an important reason why parents should encourage children to do a part-time job and learning a skill is that they will become an autonomous person. Many people believe that one of the important steps for becoming an independent person is that have a financial source; hence, when children start to work, they earn money as a salary. In the beginning, the range of salary would a low, but by spending adequate time for increasing proficiency, their payment will increase. So, the nearest step to becoming an autonomous person.
Another reason for this point of view is that children become expert person in the future. Human is born with special talents and abilities. One of the important duties of parents is that they must help their children discovering their talents and interests. Doing a part-time job help children not only finding their talent but also learning some skills. So, by doing several part-time jobs in many fields, children would chance to find their talents and interest. As we know, by following a major or job in which people have talents, children will become an prosperous person in the future.
Finally, it is occasionally said that by earning a wage, children learn how to manage their money and time. Many psychologists say that people know the worth of things when they attempt to obtain them. Imagine a child who earn money from her parents everywhere and time she wants. In this situation, she does not try and attempt it without any doubts, she does not know the value of the money, and she will not have any plans for using them. However, consider a girl who works a part-time job, for instance. In this situation, she had to make an accurate schedule for studying and working. Also, she attempts for learning a job and earning money. Because she tries for working and earning money, she understands that money has worthwhile in life so that she should make a plan for spending money.
In conclusion, considering the ideas presented in the paragraphs above, I personally believe that parents should encourage their teenage children to have a part-time job because it will teach them a lot of precious lessons, and prepare them for adult life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: whether
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... should make a plan for spending money. In conclusion, considering the ideas pre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2245.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84881209503 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55280064645 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.449244060475 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 674.1 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.2442547084 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.904761905 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0476190476 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2380952381 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373961168332 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122385121309 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0964400423409 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252095126222 0.150856017488 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0947961326128 0.0645574589148 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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