The opinions of celebrities are more important to young people than they are to older people. Do you agree or disagree?
The effect of celebrities on people in every society is an undeniable fact. Opinions are divided whether as to youngsters pay more attention to celebrities or elders. Personally, it is my confirmed idea that celebrated individual is permanent important to young social members for main concrete reasons which have been noted in the ensuing paragraphs.
The first worthwhile mentioning reason to support my point of view is that young people due to their age are looking for idols to be successful as well as them and since celebrities such as athletes or actors are successful in their career will be more crucial for young individuals. In other words, celebrities because of their success are more important for youngsters than elders since young people are in the beginning path of their life. Exemplifying myself as a great compelling example of this, when I was younger, 10 years before now, Bruce lee was my most favorite celebrity. According to one of the most known words of Bruce Lee, we should act like water helped me to adapt to every situation I was facing so that I managed to solve my difficulties in my childhood as a small weak boy. Had I never taken a page from bruce lee's opinions, I would not have faced my problems strongly.
The second significant point to champion the outlook is that youngsters rather than elders are less experienced so they are more likely to affected by celebrities. Actually, young people due to their desire of being renowned, hold celebrities as examples they mutate their behaviors. My friend's experience of mutating Brad Pit's tips is an apt illustration of this. My friend is a big fan of Brad Pit who is known for his nice face and his style of dressing that always he is in the focal point of view. Consequently, short-sighted opinion of being independent, My friend started to behave as much as possible like him but he was just mutating nothing more. being experienced like adults, celebrities' opinions could not have never affected my friend's mind.
TO wrap up what has been discussed, I strongly stand by the idea that celebrities are more important to young social members rather than older ones. This is because celebrities are idols for youngsters because of their successful life also, celebrities are seen as examples by teenagers to be renowned as soon as possible.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: as
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Suggestion: Being
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, if, look, second, so, well, while, as to, such as, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 15.1003584229 212% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1933.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88131313131 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81047219408 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537878787879 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2879273231 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.8125 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4375 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25045038815 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0914930642311 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795710913816 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172750141155 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313392302179 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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