The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
People in different generation will have different ways to ascertain. One of the most common means of young people to widen their knowledge is to follow their role model, which can be regarded as celebrities. On the other hand, older people who have been through every thick and thin in life tend to merely believe in their own experience. Therefore, I concur with the idea that opinions of famous people are more important to younger people than they are to older one
First of all, it can be said that opinions from celebrities have a huge impact on juvenile's notions. Famous entertainers build their appearance and lifestyle as perfect as possible; therefore, a myriad of young people are so attracted to that perfection that they considered celebrities as their role models, forming feelings of imitation. As a result, juvenile are greatly affected by their idols' thought and action. To illustrate, my role model is a Kpop star who do charity at all times. His affectionate heart and warm action spread out through the fandom, capitalizing his fans to follow him to do benevolent acts. In general, well-known people are beneficial individuals who can spread out positive opinions toward young generation.
Secondly, seniors are more conservative to absorb any other people's opinions other than theirs because they themselves have sailed through most of highs and lows in life. For example, my father once listened to the speech of my influencer about start-up. In the presentation, the speaker utimated a myriad of easy ways to open business. However, my father quickly disputed the claims made in the presentation because he noted that most of the ideas were ambiguous and impossible. Furthermore, seniors own negative prejudice towards celebrities. Now that older people usually read about scandals of celebrities on newspaper, they form a belief that famous people are inclined to be spoil and worse educated. Little did they know that those people are solely tiny part in a whole huge celebrities community, and there are a multitude of people who transmit positive letters to young people.
In conlusion, it is out of question that young people are more prone to be influence by reputed entertainers and athletes compared to older people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ounger people than they are to older one First of all, it can be said that opinio...
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the highs') or simply say ''most highs''.
Suggestion: most of the highs; most highs
...use they themselves have sailed through most of highs and lows in life. For example, my fathe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, in general, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1883.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11684782609 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78450677239 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54347826087 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3048027197 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.764705882 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6470588235 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.29411764706 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407141443028 0.236089414692 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112065918521 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128215137883 0.0737576698707 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25525874843 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.070908831091 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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