With traveling prospering nowadays, attracting tourists becomes significant. Some governments place emphasis on tourists' safety, while others focus on preparing historical buildings and streets. As for me, I think repairing buildings and streets is more effective for the government to attract tourists.
First of all, it is more effective for traveler attraction by repairing buildings and streets from the government. For example, when the Taiwanese government repaired the Long Shan temple, lots of vendors surged to the nearby street to sell their goods. Moreover, some merchants even invest to create an international night market for attracting travelers. Thanks to the vendor assembly and businessman investment, hundreds of people visited and purchased in this historical spot every day, making this place unprecedentedly hustle and bustle. Hence, the repairing of the Lang Shan temple from the Taiwanese government really changed this area into a tourist-attractive spot.
Secondly, the better appearance of old buildings and streets from government repairing can obtain a better reputation, thus attracting more tourists. For instance, after the British government repaired the color of Big Ben, lots of news introduced this great masterpiece to the audiences, bringing about a large number of travelers. Besides, the tourists who had visited Big Ben gave astonishing praise about it. With the positive praise passing one to another person, it became the world's most preference visiting spot and it held fifty traveling tours every day. Thus, the well-repaired Big Ben made England be the place which tens of thousands of travelers called on.
Thirdly, safety improvement cannot effectively attract more visitors since most people travel with tourism which provides safe traveling. Take my family and me for Example; when we traveled abroad, we always tended to join the professional tourism which had several tour guides for the group protection. By touring with a safe traveling group, we put less concern on the local safety issue. Additionally, the touring group had their own touring bus, making us safe to shuttle each of the historical sites. The tour company even arranged for us to accommodate in the five-star hotel with the police station nearby. Thus, the safety improvement for the government is unnecessary in that commercial tourism can already provide enough safety for traveling.
In conclusion, I hold the profound conviction that it is more effective for the government to attract tourists. After all, not only can it attract more merchants to invest but it can also gain a better reputation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 305, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...rpiece to the audiences, bringing about a large number of travelers. Besides, the tourists who ha...
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Line 5, column 611, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (England) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
... the well-repaired Big Ben made England be the place which tens of thousands of tr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, well, while, after all, as for, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2228.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48768472906 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9110007899 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546798029557 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.0481095726 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.095238095 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.28571428571 5.45110844103 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289164737226 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0959015294313 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0945188828524 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18045618468 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462517981803 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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