In order to be successful, a person must be open to new ideas and willing to change his or her mind.
In this day and age, people find it increasingly difficult to stick to one concept all the way through because of the rapid change of modern society. Accordingly, a hot-debated topic arises: whether or not we have to be open to fresh insight as well as like to change ourselves' mind in order to become success. Although some individuals do not regard these behaviors as necessaity, the majority of people including me hold the opposite view for the following reasons.
First and foremost, embracing new ideas means we have more common topics to talk with different people, which is critical to one's whole study and career life. As is known to all, the widen our thinking is, the more likely we enjoy various conversations with all walks of life. This will absolutely leave a brilliant impression on others, as is shown in following case. My brother Jack never afraid to change his mind or to avoid new insights he encountered. Thanks to his spirit, he may consider problems under all circumstances since he had experienced and learned from them before. He even became more successful than his co-workers and got promoted soon as he embraced a wide range of mind and view point.
Another point worth mentioning is that being willing to change one's own mind and accepting new views facilitate us to realize our invisible mistakes, thus lead to our betterment. To state it concisely, it is more than normal for one to be conscious of his or her own mistakes or misconceptions. However, it is not that hard for people on the sideline to do it, objectively suggesting us we are actually doing the wrong thing. Therefore, provided that we are not reluctant to think from an another point of view, feeling happy to meet new ideas, we have more chances to success since we can avoid a great number of mistakes. Otherwise, we will make the same mistake again and again, which is harmful to our life for sure.
Admittedly, opinions from others can be wrong or vised from time to time as people are raised and grown up in various environment. Nevertheless, it cannot be a convincing statement when it come to the change of mind and accepting new insights, since every successful person has been through all kinds of changes in some points of their life and embracing new idea constinously.constantlyTo put it into a nutshell, you are well-advised to be open to fresh ideas as well as new mindset for the sake of your bright future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...ccordingly, a hot-debated topic arises: whether or not we have to be open to fresh insight as ...
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Suggestion: ideas'; idea's
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Message: One of these determiners is redundant in this context. Choose only one: 'a point' or 'another point'.
Suggestion: a point; another point
...that we are not reluctant to think from an another point of view, feeling happy to meet new idea...
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Message: Did you mean 'comes'?
Suggestion: comes
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2008.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75829383886 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85726968051 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561611374408 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.4518249848 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.5 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.375 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326967681472 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0923134131465 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0950718724134 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193445906462 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0693650619094 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.