If a person wants to be successful, he or she must be open minded to new ideas and willing to change his or her mind.
Success, the objective for everyone, has been valued and even triggers a heated discussion over what qualities can give rise to success. Avoiding being open-minded to new ideas and being willing to change his or her mind, in some people’s views, is preferable. Contrary to these people’s opinions is my perspective that to succeed in life, it is beneficial for people to be open-minded, due to the contribution to efficiency and relationships.
What must be prioritized is that being open-minded, rather than being stubborn, helps a person enhance efficiency because of reducing time and error. First of all, it is obvious that an open-minded person spends less time doing things than others. To be more specific, when people have to learn subjects in the school, including mathematics, physics, and chemistry, an open-minded person can learn fast and outperform in the school because he or she is willing to learn any concepts derived from teachers; however, teachers may find it hard to impart knowledge to the students who insist in their own opinion and refuse to accept new knowledge. Furthermore, it is being open-minded that helps a person reduce error. In detail, an open-minded person is willing to follow others’ advice after knowing he or she makes mistakes, so he or she has more opportunities to be successful in the academic environment or in the workplace; by contrast, it is difficult to get such achievement for those who avoid accepting advice since they will commit mistakes over and over again.
What is equally worth discussing is that being willing to accept new ideas helps a person form intimate relationships with old friends and new friends. To begin with, relationships with old friends can be maintained when a person is willing to accept new ideas. To be more concise, when a person receives advice from old friends, he or she is willing to accept advice and change his or her mind, thus becoming a well-rounded person and succeeding in professional life; in contrast, stubborn people may find it difficult to change their minds and even anger their friends when they obtain advice from their old buddies, so they cannot receive advice from old friends and will thus have fewer chances to outperform in professional life. Moreover, it is an open-minded person that can develop close relationships with new friends. To explain it deeper, people from all works of life enjoy making friends with a person who is willing to accept new ideas, so an open-minded person can seek help from these friends in personal life; stereotyped people, nonetheless, will have hard time making friends with diverse backgrounds, so their personal life will not be improved.
Efficiency, the most important skill in life, will be boosted when a person is open-minded. Relationships, the foundation for success, will be facilitated and maintained if a person is willing to accept new ideas. To sum up, only when a person is open-minded can he or she succeed in the world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 399, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to fast'
Suggestion: to fast
...mistry, an open-minded person can learn fast and outperform in the school because he...
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Line 7, column 274, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'succeeds'.
Suggestion: succeeds
...n a person is open-minded can he or she succeed in the world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, nonetheless, so, thus, well, in contrast, first of all, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 15.1003584229 225% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2499.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 494.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05870445344 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90483855034 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.433198380567 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 753.3 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 124.171614485 48.9658058833 254% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 156.1875 100.406767564 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.875 20.6045352989 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3125 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.515948367873 0.236089414692 219% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.219211832795 0.076458572812 287% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112833961377 0.0737576698707 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.372507763237 0.150856017488 247% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343640207942 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 11.7677419355 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.66 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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