In order to stay healthy, many people choose to exercise. Some people tend to exercise individually such as running and riding bicycles, etc. Some people tend to participate in group exercises such as team sports. Which one do you prefer and why?
For a long time, exercising has been one of the most essential elements for people to keep themselves fit. In this regard, there have been controversies as to whether individuals should do sports alone or in a group. Needless to say that the aim of both options is being healthy; however, I tend to participate in a group for two compelling reasons which I will elucidate in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, doing sports in a group can boost one 's mood by making a friend. To be more specific, in this hectic life, making a friend is an efficient way for people to run away from the daily grinds. My own experience can drive this claim home. I had lots of depression problems during my college time. Thus, I visited a doctor and he has offered me to participate in a sport group to overcome this challenge. Consequently, I enrolled in a football class that was holding on campus. At first, I was an isolated person, but after one week I found a friend, Ali, who was in my group. As time passed, we got closer to each other. We started to go to restaurants, watched numerous movies, and spent so much time with each other. Surprisingly, it was a quick cure for me to back to my normal routine life. Had I not engaged in a sport group, I would not have been able to find a friend to help me to return to my regular life.
Secondly, it is crystal clear that one of the lessons about life that one can understand from sport is the skill of team working which can be obtained by engaging in an exercising group. To put this in a more vivid picture, when individuals involve in a sport band, they learn that they have to pay attention to everyone's idea to reach the goal sooner. Furthermore, people should respect the other members' thoughts and cooperate with them to have more reliable outcomes. With this in mind, one can utilize this lesson in his life to gain more valuable experiences through his efforts. Without any shadow of doubt, the more people learn to cooperate with their peers, the more chances they have to obviate the difficulties in their life. This explanation is a credible evidence that team working and learning how to collaborate with other members in a group can lead to a person's prosperity.
In conclusion, with taking all the preceding arguments into consideration, I vehemently believe that doing sports in a group not only can recover individuals' bad mood, but also can teach people a lesson about life: team working.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
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Suggestion:
... other. We started to go to restaurants, watched numerous movies, and spent so mu...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
... other members in a group can lead to a persons prosperity. In conclusion, with tak...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, as to, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2020.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58049886621 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66462584069 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532879818594 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1730062325 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1904761905 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7619047619 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156744121322 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460056734919 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042166063782 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113809895018 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437426732507 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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