Which one do you prefer:
1) A company offering you a job with challenging and interesting project but less vacation days or
2) Another company offering you a job thas is not so challenging and interesting but more vacation days
In this hectic life, finding a decent job has always been a concern for people. In this regard, a controversy might arise as to whether it is better for individuals to opt an appealing job with fewer vacation days or a routine occupation with more vacation days. I, for one, tend to choose the latter approach for two compelling reasons which I will elucidate in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, relieving the stress is a vital element for everyone to have a higher efficiency at work which can be obtained by more vacation days. To be more specific, a person who has a routine post that is not so challenging can focus on his task with no stress because he knows how to do it well. Moreover, if any issue arises, one will tackle the problem faster due to the fact that it would not be sophisticated. However, if people do their jobs with more concentration and less stress, the rate of efficacy of work will be higher. Needless to say that going on vacation can calm disturbed minds and boosts people's energy that definitely diminishes their stress and enhances their work's productivity.
Secondly, if people have more vacation days, they will have more times to devote to their family. In this chaotic life, it is crucially important for individuals to spend more time with their family to run away from the daily grinds. Furthermore, today's work-time is longer than before; therefore, people have not adequate time to be with their family that can lead to deleterious effects on their children and wife. My own experience can drive this claim home. When I worked at a company that work-time was really long, I could not see my family enough, and it had a terrible impact on my daughter. Thus, I decided to change my work with a routine job, but it had more vacation days. After that, I spent much time with my wife and my daughter, thanks to the more vacation days that I had. Those days, I realized that what an opportunity I lost when I was working at my previous company. Had I not had more vacation days, I have not been able to be with my family and fix my relationship with my daughter and wife.
In conclusion, considering foregoing points and examples, I vehemently believe that a job with more vacation days, even not so challenging, takes precedence over a job with fewer vacation days. It is because not only will it reduce stress and increase the efficiency of the work but it also causes that people have more time with their family.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 123, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
... this regard, a controversy might arise as to whether it is better for individuals to opt an ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2031.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62642369021 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59218506577 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496583143508 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9249148842 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.894736842 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1052631579 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.10526315789 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192065358524 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709876110121 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568781871077 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138718036868 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0224859324905 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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