Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
For a long time, finding an efficient method of teaching has been indeed a great concern for teachers. Although some lecturers prefer to teach the educational materials, some teachers tend to go farther and make their personal opinions known to students as a new method. In this regard, a question might arise as to whether teachers should convey their social or political perspective to students or not. I, for one, concur with this notion that lecturers should not express their social or political views in classrooms for two compelling reasons which I will elucidate in the ensuing lines.
To begin with, if personal political or social views of teachers were against those of the board's, the probability of expulsion from school would increase. To be more specific, the board of the school might be informed of the notions which lecturers make known to students in the classroom. Never are teachers able to have good days at that school if the principal disagreed with their views, and this will definitely enhance the projection of getting fired. Take, for instance, a teacher who criticizes the former president of Iran in the classroom because of his attitude towards the Hijab in Iran; a law that forces women to cover all of their body. That being said, the principal is a huge fan of Hijab. In this situation, there would be an invisible conflict between them which be more detrimental to teacher's job position.
Secondly, it is crystal clear that some of the students look at their teachers as a role model; therefore, they have a significant impact on students' attitudes. In this regard, when lecturers convey their perspectives to students, even unconsciously, some students might take a position as an antagonist. Despite this group of students spend time in the classroom, but they do not tend towards the materials which the teacher presents anymore since their personal views about social or political are in contradiction to teachers'. My own experience can drive this claim home. When I studied chemical engineering at the University of Tehran, I must take a course in politics. After two sessions, my professor brought a controversy up about the politic crisis in Iran. Moreover, he tried to convince all the students to accept his opinion about the subject, in spite of a different vantage point that most of the students had. After all, I never participate in that class until the last session, for it was unacceptable for me to hear somethings that are not true. Had the teacher not conveyed his personal views, I would have been participating in that class, and never failed that course.
In conclusion, considering all the preceding points and examples, I vehemently believe that talking about the personal thoughts in class not only may put teachers against board but also may change some students' views about the class and the teacher. It is axiomatic that these outcomes are detrimental to both teacher's job position and the student's learning process.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 311, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
... In this regard, a question might arise as to whether teachers should convey their social or ...
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Line 3, column 292, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'Never' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: Are Never
...ake known to students in the classroom. Never are teachers able to have good days at that...
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Line 5, column 36, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... Secondly, it is crystal clear that some of the students look at their teachers as a ro...
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Line 7, column 359, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to process'
Suggestion: to process
... job position and the students learning process.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, after all, as to, for instance, in conclusion, talking about, in spite of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2495.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 496.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03024193548 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72273803125 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510080645161 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 753.3 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7167759918 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.80952381 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.619047619 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47619047619 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253432757355 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743347497078 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651505851527 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160978521468 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0506897639679 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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