In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
In this progressive and sophisticated world where we live in, human beings have been looking for best ways to make decisions about their own lives. Some people believe that consulting with parents were more common among youngsters in order to make decisions, but nowadays they are more independent to make decisions. However, others have an opposite point of view. In my vantage point, today young people are more able to decide about their own lives than past. In what follows, I will elaborate on my perspective.
First it is significant to be mentioned that, advent of technology paves a way for youngsters to make decisions without depending on parents. Put it in other words, influence of technology and specially internet is of significant importance in individuals' lifestyle and decision making. Young people spend most of their time on the internet, so they can find any solution for their problems only by searching on the internet. That is the reason why youngsters do not need their parents' advice in order to make the best decision. Besides, by following celebrities' news and imitating their manner, youngsters make their decisions and approaches based on celebrities ways. For instance, my young sister decide to go to the art university, since one of the famous persons in Instagram,who she like, choose this field of study. She influenced by this celebrities lifestyle and wish to be a painter. In contrast, when I was at my sister's age, my parents decide for me to study chemistry at university.
Another reason which deserves some attention here is that, in the past youngsters have less knowledge than their parents, so they rely on their parents to make decisions for them. But, nowadays, youngsters have enhanced their knowledge and broaden their perspective toward issues, and use it to make decisions when they encounter with many choices during their life. As a result they do not need parents to make decisions for them.
From what has been discussed above, we can safely reach the conclusion that, in the past young people depended too much on their parents due to lack of knowledge and have limited access to internet.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, look, so, for instance, in contrast, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1794.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02521008403 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72039707103 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543417366947 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1098432773 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.529411765 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76470588235 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.499418225634 0.236089414692 212% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147966137086 0.076458572812 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102521727227 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.300931115872 0.150856017488 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435522228631 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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