People are not only learning thinks from universities or from their work . which do you think people can learn an extra skill
1. learning playing music
2. learning games and sport
3. learning
LEARNING SKILLS HAS AN ENORMOUS LEVERAGE ON OUR QUOTIDIAN ROUTINE LIFE. IT INFLUENCE IN A DIRECT AND INTANGIBLE WAY. IT HAS AN INDELIBLE IMPACT ON PERSON’S IDEOLOGY, PREFERENCE, AND LIFE STANDARD. ALTHOUGH SOME PEOPLE HOLD THE VIEWPOINT THAT EDUCATIONAL INSTITUTION AND OUR JOB EQUIP US WITH ALL KNOWLEDGE THAT PEOPLE MAY NEED. HOWEVER, OTHERS MAY HOLD A DIFFERENT INTELLECT AND DISAGREE WITH THIS NOTION. MY PERSONAL EXPERIENCE AND ACTUAL OBSERVATION OF LIFE WHICH HAD LED ME TO DISAGREE WITH THE IDEA THAT UNIVERSITIES AND OUR CAREER COULD PROVIDE US WITH ALL SKILLS WE NEED BUT THERE ARE MANY OTHER WAYS LIKE PLAYING MUSIC CAN PROVIDE A GOLDEN OPPORTUNITY TO ADD TO OUR SKILLS. IN THE FOLLOWING ESSAY, I SHALL DELVE INTO MUST OUTSTANDING REASONS.
FIRST OF ALL, MANY TALENTED MUSICIANS TEACH THEMSELVES BY LISTENING AND PRACTICING IT. FURTHERMORE, THEIR SKILL BECAME AS A PERMANENT CAREER AND SUPPORT THEIR FINANCIALS. FOR INSTANCE, BETHOVEN, NEVER STUDY MUSIC IN SCHOOLS OR LEARN IT OR FROM HIS JOB, HE WAS GIFTED BOY AND WORKS HARD UNTIL HE MAKES ALL HIS FAMOUS SINPHONIES THAT ALL PEOPLES ARE LOVE TO HEAR TILL OUR ERA.
IN ADDITION, MODERN TECHNOLOGY IN OUR DAYS EQUIP US WITH ALL THE INFORMATION THAT WE NEEDS AND CAN BE EASILY REACH EVEN IF WE ARE NOT LEARN IT FROM OUR EDUCATIONAL OR CAREER ENVIRONMENT. TODAY, EACH PERSON CAN SIMPLY GETS THE LEARNING FROM WATCHING A YOU TUBE INCLUDING MUSIC. MOREOVER, SMART PHONES HAVE MANY APPS THAT WE CAN DOWNLOADED TO LEARN HOW TO PLAY MUSIC, TUNED OUR INSTRUMENTS, AND GIVE SOME BACKGROUND IMPORTANT INFORMATION HOW TO KEEP UP TO DATE WITH ALL NEW MUSICAL ORCHESTRA AND INVENTIONS.
TO SUM UP, AFTER CONTEMPLATING ALL THE REASONS THAT I MENTIONED BEFORE, TAKING ALL THE FACTORS INTO CONSIDERATION. I WOULD LIKE TO REINFORCE MY IDEA THAT LEARNING MUSICAL SKILLS COULD BE PERFORMED WITHOUT STUDYING OR LEARNING FROM OUR JOBS BECAUSE IT COULD BE LEARNED BY DEPENDING ON ALL OUR EFFORTS AND BY USING THE MODERN TECHNOLOGY TO HELP US IN OUR GOAL.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 76, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'influences'?
Suggestion: Influences
...ERAGE ON OUR QUOTIDIAN ROUTINE LIFE. IT INFLUENCE IN A DIRECT AND INTANGIBLE WAY. IT HAS ...
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Line 7, column 267, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... LEARN IT OR FROM HIS JOB, HE WAS GIFTED BOY AND WORKS HARD UNTIL HE MAKES ALL HI...
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Line 11, column 86, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'WE' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'need'
Suggestion: Need
...UIP US WITH ALL THE INFORMATION THAT WE NEEDS AND CAN BE EASILY REACH EVEN IF WE ARE ...
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Line 11, column 135, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'learned', 'learnt'.
Suggestion: Learned; Learnt
... CAN BE EASILY REACH EVEN IF WE ARE NOT LEARN IT FROM OUR EDUCATIONAL OR CAREER ENVIR...
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Line 11, column 218, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'CAN' requires the base form of the verb: 'get'
Suggestion: Get
...IRONMENT. TODAY, EACH PERSON CAN SIMPLY GETS THE LEARNING FROM WATCHING A YOU TUBE I...
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Line 11, column 250, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'A' or 'YOU'?
Suggestion: A; YOU
... SIMPLY GETS THE LEARNING FROM WATCHING A YOU TUBE INCLUDING MUSIC. MOREOVER, SMART P...
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Line 11, column 328, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'CAN' requires the base form of the verb: 'download'
Suggestion: Download
...SMART PHONES HAVE MANY APPS THAT WE CAN DOWNLOADED TO LEARN HOW TO PLAY MUSIC, TUNED OUR I...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, for instance, in addition, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1685.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77912779865 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59940652819 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.8261481325 48.9658058833 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.333333333 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4666666667 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.13333333333 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23508330554 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778953834304 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0783372466682 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156505223923 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381584624086 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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