life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandfathers where children
Time is a double sharp edged sward. It Is importantly to use it correctly because as someone said “ time is money.” Although this fact is admitted by all people but still most people especially young ones are spent most their times in advertisement and doing things they enjoy to do over doing thing which have to do them. I personally,believed young aged people are spend time more on their treciuos things for several reasons.
To begin with, it is a fact according to statics result and researches that young adult are spend most of their time watching entertainment. Statistics shown on 2008 that the k-12 students age spent most of their hours on playing video games which they like per week. Acoording to these result the parents and society give attention to a huge danger that their kids are face it, which are, the lost of a precious time on unuseful thing and instead of doing most valuable things like study. For instance, if we take in our consideration the time that our kids spend on these advertisement in contrast, to their educational output. We reach to furious facts. Morover, besides the effect on their education, these enjoyment things, some of them, have a negative impact on these generation health and eventually on their life welfare.
In addition, many are spend their time doing these enjoybul things because they feel more comfortable, relax, and happy when doing it. Furthermore, they also spend time chatting with their friends during gamming. They hitting two birds by one stone enjoying and speaking with their friends. For example, many new version of video games today likefortnight , besides those kids can play and speak with many people on chatting through the games. They doing that without feeling of the time they spend it. Moreover, they abandon anything important like take their meals at time in order to not leave on minute without continue playing.
In comclusion, although some people feels that young people are spend more time in doing important things than enjoying their time. I strongly refutes their opinion because according to the statistics result which reveal the opposite and the y feel more enjoyable when spent time in playing or doing lovely things than usefull ones.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...still most people especially young ones are spent most their times in advertisem...
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'enjoy doing'.
Suggestion: enjoy doing
... in advertisement and doing things they enjoy to do over doing thing which have to do them....
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Suggestion: spent
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Suggestion: spent
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Suggestion: spent
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Suggestion: spent
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, still, for example, for instance, in addition, in contrast, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1871.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00267379679 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54531063374 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516042780749 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.5717086122 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.058823529 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.29411764706 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.5376344086 325% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0486694716687 0.236089414692 21% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0198784627368 0.076458572812 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0305916051291 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.040954014591 0.150856017488 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364272867438 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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