People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There are a plethora of reasons why students choose to attend university in this day and age. In my opinion, the single most important reason is to achieve financial security in the future. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, a university degree is required in order to be hired at even the most basic jobs these days. Individuals in possession of only a high school diploma are employed solely in very low paying and low-skilled fields. This fact is evident to young people all over the world right now, and I believe it makes them feel quite a lot of urgency regarding their educational qualifications. This is demonstrated by the fact that in the past, when people with just a high school education could get satisfying jobs, enrollment at universities was much lower than today. Moreover, my friends and I have noticed that recently it has even become necessary to have a graduate degree in order to begin a career; no longer is it possible to achieve professional success with just an undergraduate degree. It seems that this trend will not reverse any time soon, and thus students will continue to consider their financial future when making decisions about what to do when they finish their secondary education.
Moreover, universities provide wonderful opportunities for networking which help young people find high-paying jobs following their graduation. The unemployment rate has been quite high for most of the past decade and it is very difficult for even well-educated people to find employment. Many experts argue that the people we meet in university play a large role in our long-term professional success. For example, my brother recently founded a successful online business which has provided him with a substantial income. He co-founded the business in a partnership with two like-minded students whom he met in a freshman computer science class. My brother often points out that the partnership which he formed with his students was even more valuable than the degree that he was awarded four years later. In contrast to my brother’s success, many of my friends who chose not to attend university have a limited set of contacts as their social circles have expanded very little since childhood.
In conclusion, I believe that young people choose to enroll in post-secondary education mostly in order to secure their financial future. This is because a university degree is a prerequisite for employment in the modern era and because universities provide students with valuable opportunities for networking.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, regarding, second, so, thus, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, first of all, in contrast to, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2178.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11267605634 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93071709506 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537558685446 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.074929819 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.22222222222 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18739833888 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0642097009058 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553181903683 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130070902675 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0402827728968 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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