People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

As we are discussing the meaning of studying, I believe it is a path of recogninzing oneself, other people and the whole society. During the time when we were young ,we learned how to read words and calculate numbers. By the time we growing up, we may consider the world as well as ourselved more comprehensively. Thus in order to cultivate ourself to be a useful individual to the community, going to the university would be a wise choice for eveyone who maintain this idea. No matter what is the reason for one to go to the university, the exprience is being valued by most of us as it is a precious memory recorded the procedure of exploring inside and outside of the world with our own attitude. I will address my views thereinafter.

To begin with, people who attending to the college or university want to learng more specific courses in order to get more cultivated, hence they will adapt to the rapid developing-world. Just 20 years ago, there is no major named e-Business or in other word, the Internet Business in the universtiy, while the ubiquitous Internet has changed our daily life radically, this business in the Internet is becoming more and more important today. Thus, as a course, this field opened its gate for students years ago, then in the present day, we can see lots of Interent companies is creating miracles in the stocks as well as on the headline of the media.Thus, where there is a demands in the world, there will be a major in the university. Even in China as I know, Playing networking games is also a major as the cosiderable incoming of the gamers who win the game.

In addtition, some people go to the university as to study a certain field, which could change the world. As the youngest scientist in the cover of the Magazine Nature, Cao Yang has attacted the worlds attention who under the guidance of his tutor, found the specific feature of graphene could transmitt current without lost in certain condition, or the more common meaning is that with this techology, e-car will have a much longer distance than car with fuel. This advancing technology would trigger next scientific evolution as the energy would not be a stymie for human in the earth. Thus, Cao Yang and his team would be rememebered by all of us just like we knew some celebrities in the history.

To me, I believe, the universtiy is a large stage. Higher education, more friends, more opportunity. When I was a freshman, I vulnteered to attend to a team which help poor people near our University. Actually it was a shock to me, in that there is no need for you to find some poorest people in other developing country who is still starving. They are just around us, when I entered the little apratment of a primary student whose father was badly ill , dying in the bed. Tears in all our our faces, then we just make a donation besides the money as well as the clothes and some housework for this poor family. Then I found the poverty is still around us, so we must do out best tofight against it. It was a meaningfull class, I'd learned a lot and the eye of that young boy would be rememberd by me for a long time which inspired me to study. If we got cultivated, we can have the skills to help others.The world will be better by our hands.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, hence, if, may, so, still, then, thus, well, while, as to, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2669.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 590.0 407.700716846 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52372881356 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92848004997 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64212859343 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 302.0 212.727598566 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51186440678 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 852.3 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.9495902863 48.9658058833 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.043478261 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.652173913 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73913043478 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12547829195 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0357757117979 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443579262261 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0768384196491 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0125968145781 0.0645574589148 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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