People learn things better from those at their own level- such as fellow students or co workers- than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors.
The prompt states that people getting knowladge and learning from those at the same level of eductation is easier than if they learn from people at higher level. I disagree with the prompt statement, for two reasons, which I will discuss in the following essay.
To begin, supervisors and teachers are more well-informed, trained, and they have significant knowlage, which definitly based on real experience. This is the best exmplefied from my personal experince, when I was at high school, I had defculities in understanding Math, not all the lessons I could manage them. Therefore, I asked for help from my friend, who I mistakenly thought that he was better than me in Math. After many days, I realized that he was teaching me wrong. Thus, at the end, after time consuming, I had to take extra Math class after school. However, this time, it was more beneficial and effective; I could master Math perfectly. Therefore, getting konwlage from expertise is better, as it save time from wasting in tries and errors.
Further, Supervisors and expertises have their own strategies, which meet everyone needs. Thus, to be tought under their supervision, it will be the best approach in getting the required information with the best methods that fit you. For instance, when I was studying English, usually I used to study with my friend, but this affects me negatively. Because we are at the same level, my friend couldn’t correct me in each single mistake; even when he tried to correct me, he didn’t use the best approach in teaching me . Therefore, when I went to take Toefl exam, I didn’t hit the high score; which I need it. However, when I went to study in languages center, few weeks, I could sucessfully pass the exam. This is because the English teacher was give each student the best method, which fits every one his/ her needs. The above example illustrates why studying from people who have experince and quilified for teaching us is more effective and beneficial.
To sum up, I have come up with the opinion that learing things from qualified people who have remarkable experince in the specific field, is the best approach that one can take it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1802.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87027027027 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66296364782 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543243243243 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4052196011 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.111111111 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5555555556 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77777777778 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231548374615 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0676716425136 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104055901948 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161077040094 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114296820275 0.0645574589148 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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