Students are more influenced by their teacher than by their friends
The prompt says that students are likely be affected by their teachers more than their friends. However, I disagree with the prompt's statement for two reasons. First, students see themselves as rivals, which is not the case with their teachers as they see them supervisors. Second, each student has interests which are compatible with the friends more than with the teachers. I will go deeply through each reason in the following essay.
To begin, students are usually at the same age; and thus, they look at each other as competitors. This is best demonstrated by personal experience. Last year, My cousin quarreled with his brother to buy a high-brand cell phone, which is extremely expensive, and it didn't suitable for their expenditures. However, my cousin insisted to buy it, although non of his teachers had that a costy phone. My cousin's importune was for his feeling of competition with his friends as they have that phone. Students always in a race, who will buy this first? Or who will be admired by this girl. Therefore, classmates influence each other more than be affected by their teachers.
Second, students always have the same interests such as going have fun and eating out, and traveling from time to time. Usually, they have the same life's patterns. For instance, if one has his car, the rest of group will seek to a car as well, even if that is not affordable for their families. Yet, to share the interests, every one will seek to have what the others have. Upon my cousin’s example, one day he did an accident by his mothers' car. As time passed, we realized that accident didn't by him, rather by his friend, who was training to learn driving to be as my cousin. Thus, the relationship between the classmates is more significant than their relationship with their teachers.
To sum up, I am in opinion that teachers have no effect on the students. This because they are not at the same age of the students, or their interests. On the other hand, the students influence each other to cope with the rest interests, to extent that they do unaffordable things that burden their families’ shoulders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'prompts'' or 'prompt's'?
Suggestion: prompts'; prompt's
...r friends. However, I disagree with the prompts statement for two reasons. First, stude...
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Line 3, column 266, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...e, which is extremely expensive, and it didnt suitable for their expenditures. Howeve...
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Line 5, column 490, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... time passed, we realized that accident didnt by him, rather by his friend, who was t...
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Line 5, column 543, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'learning'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'train' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: learning
... rather by his friend, who was training to learn driving to be as my cousin. Thus, the r...
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Line 5, column 552, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to drive'.
Suggestion: to drive
...y his friend, who was training to learn driving to be as my cousin. Thus, the relations...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, thus, well, as for, for instance, such as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81471389646 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60829417042 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50408719346 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.0126741639 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.8260869565 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9565217391 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21739130435 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356697029354 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102234706245 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13090402432 0.0737576698707 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243133480151 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0876861176893 0.0645574589148 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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