Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time

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Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time.

The prompt says that there are two kinds of teenagers, while some prefer to live with their families long time, the others want to be independent earlier. I believe that giving adolescents a chance to live alone is better for three reasons.
First, living independently away from the family gives one more room to face his study alone and its hardships. For example, if that student has a weakness in a specific subject and her teacher asks her to pay more attention to this weakness, she will totally rely on herself as no parents to ask them for help. She will search on the internet to find out more about that topic, thus gaining confidence and enhancing his self-education.
Second, after the study finishes, The work-life needs someone independent to deal with work commitment. For instance, that one must wake up early every day having breakfast then go to work. What if there is no one to help him prepare breakfast and be importune to wake up him? The answer is no one. Therefore, one of the benefits of living alone is being responsible for yourself.

Moreover, living away from the parents helps in gaining experience in dealing with daily life's situations. For example, if that young adult works and has a small salary, what will happen if she spends most of her wages before the month end? In the case of being with the family, she inevitably will ask for help from her parents. However, if he lives alone, he will try to find a solution and spend the rest of his salary sparingly. The above examples emphasize the importance of living alone when one becomes a young adult, gains confidence, be responsible, and independent are the pay off of moving to a different home living away from the parents.

Therefore, parents should encourage their children when they become ready for that, give them a chance and more space to face life obstacles by living in a separate home and depend on themselves. Separate homes don't only separate in the place, but also in all life-responsibilities whether study, work, or the daily-life situations.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1701.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80508474576 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69885207953 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564971751412 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3263845779 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.058823529 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8235294118 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272649316645 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0801889497353 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0806866825643 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147474835906 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0967079822951 0.0645574589148 150% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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