People learn things better from those who are at the same level with them, rather then learning it from highly professional people.
Do you agree or disagree with this statement
Nowadays, self development is an essential concept of professional life, and everyone is thriving to achieve as much success in this field as possible. Some may assume that it is much more profitable to comprehend a specific concept by learning it from those who are at the same level with you. However, I strongly object this idea ,because, both of my and other successful people's experience.
Firstly, I assume that by working with a person who is much more sophisticated than you, as a learner, you can obtain abundant amount of new information in the field which you are engaged in. Moreover, there are enormous techniques which you can implement on your professional career, and the most advantageous way of learning those concepts is observing and asking questions to those people who have experience. Based on my daily life, I always tend to ask advice from my teachers, and the main reason is that I consider them much more strong and highly skilled individuals in life. By the way, this concept suits from both educational and life sophistication wise.
Secondly, to my mind, by working with the people who are at the equivalent level with me, I think that there would not be any development in my career. And also, I assume that a person will never reach climax stage of his or her ability, by working in those conditions. Because, if we think logically, if all of the people who surround you can not achieve any new skill, then that means you will never obtain anything significantly beneficial for you in that environment. Consequently, a person always has to thrive and work as hard as possible by him or herself to gain new precious ability in professional career, which is quite complex in contemporary world.
In conclusion, based on my personal assumption, it is much more worthwhile and effective to obtain new information or to develop yourself, by being in an environment where there are highly skilled people around you.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 163, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'assumes'.
Suggestion: assumes
...ess in this field as possible. Some may assume that it is much more profitable to comp...
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Line 1, column 333, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ou. However, I strongly object this idea ,because, both of my and other successful...
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Line 3, column 306, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ons. Because, if we think logically, if all of the people who surround you can not achieve...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, while, as to, i think, in conclusion, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1614.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87613293051 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87416152701 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522658610272 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.2694240262 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.5 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5833333333 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6666666667 5.45110844103 214% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285073888705 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106814435875 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0856649038497 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173440754914 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0744704868759 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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