Extended family

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Extended family

Nowadays, with the significant development of all of the fields, people's outlook has changed tremendously. I assume that in contemporary world, the general importance of family, especially extended family, has diminished, and there are excessive reasons for this statement. Based on my own observations, I will support this concept with numerous evidences in the following essay.
Firstly, it is quite straightforward that in modern world, most of its inhabitants think only about themselves. Consequently, the concept of maintaining a strong, and a large family starts to fade away. To my mind, this is a normal human desire, and we can not judge other people for their own views on this world. However, in the past, enormous amounts of members of society, were only thinking about creating, and sustaining a durable family. Consequently, we need to comprehend that our mindset has encountered some modifications, and as a society, we need to obey to these changes.
Secondly, abundant amount of people, particularly teens, have a tendency to create a successful career for themselves, and for obtaining this goal, they need to put significant amount of effort, and hardwork to their professional life. Indeed, I consider that for achieving specific goals in life, a person has to give up on certain activities, and by doing so, they will spend remarkably much less time with their families. Thus, the strong bonds between them and their family members, will get destructed in a constant trend.
Thirdly, as we all know, most of the families have some strict policies, and enormous amounts of teens does not adore these rules. Because of that the mentality of having a large family starts to diminish. Based on my own personal experience, every person who I know, has an inclination of leaving their contemporary family because of those rigid rules, which they have in their own families.
Fourthly, it is very obvious that sustaining an adequate family is very complicated because, of fiscal problems. Indeed, I assume that having a large family will have some detrimental impact on your wallet, and most of the people does not want to have these hardships in life. Thus, majority of members of our society, tend to have a considerably much small family.
In conclusion, to my mind, the interest of having an extended family has decreased throughout recent years, and I assume that this concept will continue with upcoming generations.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, as to, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2050.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1637279597 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91631749209 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51637279597 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.86738351254 589% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9146693435 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.888888889 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0555555556 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192169780185 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623447910117 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701233174249 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106743387842 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0670618877409 0.0645574589148 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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