Many people believe that it is very important to make large amounts of money, while others are satisfied to earn a comfortable living. Analyze each viewpoint and take a stand. Give specific reasons for your position.

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Many people believe that it is very important to make large amounts of money, while others are satisfied to earn a comfortable living. Analyze each viewpoint and take a stand. Give specific reasons for your position.

In contemporary world, the most essential concept for living an adequate life is related to how much do we earn monthly. I assume that the tendency of a human to gain enormous amount of money is quite straightforward, and this concept is a normal human desire. However, there are abundance of people who are satisfied with suitable money, which they earn monthly, and they are not keen on obtaining more. In my personal opinion, surpluses of money could be beneficial for a person, and there are lots of reasons for this mindset.
Firstly, with the excess amount of money, we can get tremendous amount of entertainment from life. Moreover, I consider that if a person has lots of money, than he can do whatever he desires in life, and that person can go and make his wishes come true. With this perspective, you can be engaged with variety of activities in life. For example, sports, travel, business, and etc. Consequently, while having enormous amount of money, you can get certain things from life which are not accessible to others.
Secondly, to my mind, you can improve your outlook and education significantly with the help of money. To be more precise, nowadays, education is the most important concept in our daily life, and improving it, would be worthwhile. And for this reason you need to be engeaged in specific education centers which provide great information to their students. As we all know, the most famous and the most extraordinary education centers are very expensive, and not every one could go and study in those places. Thus, if a person has ample amount of funds, he or she can get very high education in those places.
Thirdly, if a person has tremendous amount of money, he or she can provide help to this world. To be more precise, that person could be engeaged in certain movements which try to help poor people worldwide. In my personal assumption, by doing so, a person could get significant satisfaction from life. Because, by helping others, you can give them lots of opportunities in life. Moreover, there are gigantic quantity of unemployed families, and the majority of these families have children. And those families do not have enough funds to send their children to the schools. If a rich person helps them, this will have a great impact on the children's future.
In conclusion, to my mind, having abundant quantity of funds, could have enormous impact on a persons life, and this impact is very positive.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 413, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
...y are not keen on obtaining more. In my personal opinion, surpluses of money could be beneficial...
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Line 2, column 372, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
... For example, sports, travel, business, and etc. Consequently, while having enormous amo...
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Line 5, column 96, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
... funds, could have enormous impact on a persons life, and this impact is very positive....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, while, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2031.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83571428571 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69783128657 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471428571429 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.86738351254 589% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.9704843263 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.3181818182 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0909090909 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.18181818182 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128930672351 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0426753791704 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0327166493606 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0762674184841 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447089638588 0.0645574589148 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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