Many people believe that it is very important to make large amount of money, while others are satisfied to earn a comfortable living. Analyze each viewpoint and take a stand. Give specific reasons for your position.
In the modern days, money is, inevitably, necessary for human’s living. People use money to buy goods or services to satisfy themselves. However, there is the argument between making huge amount of money or earning for comfortable life are the most important. Personally, I certainly agree that making amount of money is necessary, and this essay will give further opinions and examples to support with such notion.
First and foremost, money can buy good educations. Most people realize that educations are necessary to broaden their knowledge horizon. By the way, most good institute of education require a huge amount of money to properly enroll. To illustrate this, my brother who is a basketball player in high school team, wants to enroll in the one of the famous high schools in United States because there is the best basketball club with state-of-the-art equipment. Therefore, he left from the school in Bangkok to apply in the new better one, and it uses a lot of money not only for the education but also the cost of living.
Secondly, it’s truly that enormous amount of money helps people in unexpected situations. There are always accidents and diseases those unpredictably occur to every human. For this reason, it’s necessary to prepare themselves for the expenses of those unpredictable situations. I can attest you from my own experience, my uncle is a taxi driver, his arm was broken by a car-crashed accident. In this case, he was required for surgery and had to stay in the hospital for a week. After he went out from the hospital, there was an expansive charge for all services that he needed to pay. Fortunately, his family already prepared amount of money for any unexpected cases. For this reason, people should carefully manage their money in order to allocate on emergency costs.
In conclusion, I completely agree that it’s essential to making large amount of money than the other option. This is due to the fact that money is not only used to pay for quality educations but also necessary to the unexpected cases.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, in conclusion, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1735.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02898550725 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77078405445 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542028985507 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4710561418 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.3157894737 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1578947368 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.68421052632 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225813177014 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770710274399 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539936920429 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152460743242 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626897211805 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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