Speaking of what do I prefer to learn, I would like to stand for studying a sport that I have never played before. Some people prefer to learn how to cook the food that they have not prepared before, while other individuals decide to learn to make handcrafts. I find a couple of shortcomings for these two points, and I will explain the shortcomings in the following essay and why I think learning a new sport is the best choice.
First of all, cooking food could be very dangerous. On the one hand, people might start a fire during cooking, on the other hand, people hurt themselves by using a knife all the time. This specific point is particularly important for my argument. For example, my friend Amy who tried to cook fried fish which have to use tons of oil when she was on vacation. It ended up in calling fire station officers to come because her pan was on fire causing by the oil. And the accident left a burning mark on her right hand.
Furthermore, learning to make new crafts which made by hands can waste a lot of materials and money. There are many apps on the phone which helps people to make things. But those apps do not tell people things can be difficult. The material is not easy to find and not cheap to buy. Also, people have to put lots of effect on it which might not even going to work. For instance, making a scarf by your own. Although it sounds very easy. When you tried, the needle and thread could drive you crazy. And the woolen yarn is unbelievably expensive. Even you wasted all the thread, the scarf can still look in a funny way.
Last but not least, let us talk about the favoured idea here, to learn a new sport. It introduces many benefits to exercise, and having a healthy body figure is a very important one. Due to we study and work for long hours, overweight is now a severe problem. By learning how to do a new sport, we can be more fit. Take me as an example, I learned how to swim last year, and I am glad my decision every day. Swimming not only make me healthier but also make me happier. I shake my stress off by swimming.
To draw a conclusion, I firmly believe that trying to do a new exercise is the best one, due to the facts that cooking a new course could hurt yourself, making crafts can waste money and materials, and exercising helps people to be more fit.
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- People nowadays are busier than ever in work and school They want to spend more time to learn new things Which one will you choose to learn A Learn a new sport that you have never played before B Learn to cook food different from what you have learn 70
- In universities people tend to concern more about the career prospect of the subjects they learn Some people propose that students should learn subjects with a fast job growth including math science technology and engineering even if they are interes 60
- People nowadays are busier than ever in work and school They want to spend more time to learn new things Which one will you choose to learn A Learn a new sport that you have never played before B Learn to cook food different from what you have learn 70
- The salton sea in California is actually a salty inland lake The level of salt in the lake s water what scientists call its salinity has been increasing steadily for years because the lake s water is evaporating faster than it is being replaced b 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 407, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...r instance, making a scarf by your own. Although it sounds very easy. When you tried, th...
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Line 3, column 602, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a funny way" with adverb for "funny"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ll the thread, the scarf can still look in a funny way. Last but not least, let us talk about...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, look, so, still, while, for example, for instance, i think, speaking of, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1880.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.28246013667 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3163027838 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544419134396 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.2951303566 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.6296296296 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2592592593 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14814814815 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338080859812 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746242223708 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796015475204 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17687016267 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0977883807002 0.0645574589148 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.9 11.7677419355 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 58.1214874552 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.25 10.9000537634 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.55 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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