people should spend time to try many different jobs before they choose a long-term career.
Being an engineer, a medical doctor or a lawyer are all examples of ideal positions for individuals in the modern era; o prominent are careers that people spend a conspicuous part of their life on working. Thus, it’s really important for people to find suitable long-term positions. With this regard, a considerable number of individuals want to know what type of activities are better for them to do before choosing a long-term career. A rather popular idea is that people should spend time to try many different jobs before they choose a long-term career. I similarly concur with this notion. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will elucidate my points of view in two reasons.
The first paramount reason that crosses my mind is that it can increase the chance of getting hired in decent positions in the future. Indeed, getting involved in numerous jobs, people become expert and more qualified in a large number of skills. Besides, by having these experiences, their resume will be enhanced, and it will make a positive impression on employers due to representing a multi-task person. However, if people don’t have these experiences, people will face some recruiting challenges owing to a large number of same-level competitors. Take a 22-year-old woman who has studied chemical engineering in the university as an example. Should she spend her time on some various part-time jobs such as teaching, working in different laboratories and participating in some programming projects, she will have an enriched resume that will help her to get hired in a valuable long-term position.
Another interesting reason which deserves some words here is that having tried many different jobs, people will encounter fewer dilemmas in their relationships with their future colleagues. In this case, people become familiar with a wide array of personalities, and as a consequence, their social skills will be improved. In addition, people will be aware of the atmosphere of working that can help them to be more comfortable when they enter a new working place. That being said, if they don’t have improved social skills, they won’t be able to deal with different characters. Let’s take the same aforementioned woman as an example. Should she have several communications with her co-workers, she will positively cope with her manager and other employees in the company.
To wrap everything up, considering all preceding opinions and reasons, one can conclude that spending time to try many different jobs before choosing a long-term career includes assorted superiorities for people. This is because not only does it help them to have a high chance of getting hired in a worthy career but also they will experience fewer issues in communicating with their future co-workers. Therefore, I suggest all unemployed people participate in various jobs, especially part-time jobs.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...is that people should spend time to try many different jobs before they choose a long-term car...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ple become expert and more qualified in a large number of skills. Besides, by having these experi...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ace some recruiting challenges owing to a large number of same-level competitors. Take a 22-year-...
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... can conclude that spending time to try many different jobs before choosing a long-term career...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, really, similarly, so, therefore, thus, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2429.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28043478261 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97641882102 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526086956522 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 765.0 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4273820202 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.666666667 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9047619048 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378549056559 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115561179419 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.186729924486 0.0737576698707 253% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.270913578813 0.150856017488 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.148285221396 0.0645574589148 230% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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