People in society work in many different settings, and for a variety of reasons. What do you think is the main reason why people have jobs?
to feel happier about their lives
to save money for the future
to develop new skills
Use specific examples and details to support your answer.
Some people say that it is important to have a job because this way they will have money for the present days and the future and, also because they enjoy developing new skills. However, others state otherwise. The latter think that the only way to have a job is merely to feel merriment. In my opinion, having a job is crucial because of money and it will certainly bring new skills. I feel this way as I will talk over in this article.
First of all, it is primordial to work because we will have money in the present days and we may save it for future appliances. For example, when we plan ahead our lives as for travelling abroad we will have to spend a huge amount of money and without it, it is not even possible to have a life. Furthermore, we may need money to spend with our families as we pay medical insurance and many other costs. Therefore, these examples illustrate the desideratum of having to work.
Moreover, having any kind of work may bring some benefits in our lives. For instance, we may be able to develop a skill for building a house and if our work requires to undergo it, then we are capable of executing it own our own. Besides, if our work involves being capable to make mechanical stuff, thus when travelling by car and out of a suddenly our car stops functioning, then we are capable of handling it by ourselves. Hence, those instances elucidate the necessity of developing a new skill.
Finally, I strongly believe that with a job, we will be able to develop a new skill and to save money for future desiderata because we will have money for travelling and be able to live own our own.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 166, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'undergoing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: undergoing
...ilding a house and if our work requires to undergo it, then we are capable of executing it...
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Line 3, column 217, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'owns'?
Suggestion: owns
...it, then we are capable of executing it own our own. Besides, if our work involves ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, as for, for example, for instance, i feel, kind of, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1318.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 300.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.39333333333 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46859384176 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 212.727598566 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 437.4 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4614108398 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1428571429 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4285714286 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.2142857143 5.45110844103 242% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243845726491 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0949840590452 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060010658952 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1641856483 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0366935126019 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 86.8835125448 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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