people today spend a too much money on clothing to improve appearance
There is no shortage of opinions on, should we spend a lots of money on clothing or not. In my opinion, I believes that, we should not spend to much money on clothing. I think this way for two reasons, which I explain in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, appearance of individual is not depend on the cloths they wear rather, it depends on their attitude, the way they think, the way they speak to others. My personal experience is the compelling example of this, at my first job interview, I wear cosltly suit and approached for interview with low confindence. At the end, I failed in that interview. In the interviewer feedback he mentioned that, candidate is not confident enough for position even though, he is well dressed we cannot consider him for this position. Afterwards, In my next interview, I build up confidence and improved my speaking skills and went for the next interview with just a formal dress. The result was surprising, I got selected for the software engineer position and the interviewer was impressed with my confidence as well as my speaking skill. It's certainly clear to see, how our attitude and skills matter than our clothing.
Secondly, we can save much money by limiting our cloths shopping. We can use that savings for other important reasons like learning a new course, helping homeless people and entertain purpose. As we know, human being need a cloth to hide their body and to protect them from weather. Drawing from my own experience, during pandemic I saved lots of money by not buying cloths as we don't need to go out of house frequently. So that result in an increase in my savings and used that savings for doing online coding courses and spend some part of it for needy people who need it during the pandemic. That gave me satisfaction of helping others and they were impressed with my generosity than my clothing. For this reason, we should save money by not spending much on clothing.
In conclusion, we should buy limited clothes as per our needs and not to improve appearance. Considering above two reasons, I disagree with the statement that people spend money on clothing to improve their appearance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 54, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: a lot; lots
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Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'believe'
Suggestion: believe
...ey on clothing or not. In my opinion, I believes that, we should not spend to much money...
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Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ots of money by not buying cloths as we dont need to go out of house frequently. So ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, second, secondly, so, well, i think, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1787.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76533333333 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68151068533 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5692177291 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0526315789 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7368421053 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21052631579 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206147670581 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0790736641928 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862574135416 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166249646094 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0862490811018 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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