People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do
The prompt states that people nowadays enjoy most of their time more than do something should do it. I disagree with this statement for many reasons, which I will illustrate them in the following essay.
First, if people truly spend their time in leisure activities more than the in important things that should be done, so how they will be able to afford the life requirements. To be able to pay for example the house's rent, school fees, and even the phone pill, the one has no choice to spend his time in other recreational things. Thus, if we count the work days compare to pastime days, you find them more than the later ones. Doing personal activities for fun needs a free time, thus of there is no enough free time, how could those activities be done? For example, most of people have to work five days per week as the work-low says. Therefore, it is mandatory to work more than have free time. Me and my friend when plan to travel or go even to have lunch out with our families, should first ask for vacation or wait for the end of the week.
Second, not only men who are working and have no time doing entertaining activities, but also women, and the young people. For instance, women either work or housewife, and in both cases, they have many stuff to do. For housewife, she have to care of her children or help them in studying. Therefore, doing leisure activities will be the same for the rest of the family's members, only on the weekend days.
Moreover, young people are either studying at the school or colleges during the weekdays,or some of them working. For the same reason, no enough time for enjoyment to be more than the other important time.
In conclusion, I come up with the opinion of it's not plausible to spend most of time doing activities for enjoy to the extent be more than the time spend in other essential things. This is because to afford the life expedentures from house and school and so forth. Second, as the work time has its rule and law, which should be five days per week, normally, no enough free time to spend it in personal activities, even the housewife has her own tasks toward her family's members to do.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 569, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
... those activities be done? For example, most of people have to work five days per week as the ...
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Line 5, column 199, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun stuff seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much stuff', 'a good deal of stuff'.
Suggestion: much stuff; a good deal of stuff
...housewife, and in both cases, they have many stuff to do. For housewife, she have to care ...
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Line 5, column 236, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...ve many stuff to do. For housewife, she have to care of her children or help them in...
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Line 6, column 89, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , or
...e school or colleges during the weekdays,or some of them working. For the same reas...
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Line 8, column 486, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tasks toward her familys members to do.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1766.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49363867684 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30143071549 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486005089059 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 545.4 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7679749041 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1111111111 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8333333333 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61111111111 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27834787866 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0967911270138 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0946617815545 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181977968046 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0594249087855 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.81 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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