People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
Some people argue that people are not enjoying their personal time because of hectic company schedule. They cite that now a days people are concern about their future, and dedicating their life fulfilling their obligation towards family and society. However, I strongly disagree with these people views and believe that in this modern era people are wasting their more precious time on personal entertainment rather than doing crucial tasks.
To begin with, people are spending their time in self-entertainment because of proliferating in advance technologies such as smart devices and televisions. Smartphones and televisions gradually and eventually play a role in distracting them from their important tasks. For instance, according to research, universities students are decline in numbers due to abundancy game applications on smartphones play stores. Most popular applications on App stores they contain 4 out of the top tens mobiles games, which directly impacts on the study of students. Moreover, housewife also inclined on smartphones as a result children are not getting proper diet. people are inclined towards modern technologies because it content numerous things which give relaxation and entertainment the people to reduce stress. Thus, people now a days wasting more valuable time due to boosting of modern technologies in fast pace.
Furthermore, in spite of doing pivotal task, people are mesmerizing on personal enjoyment such as travelling with family by quit jobs for a couple of months, which causes recession and bankrupt condition of company. For instance, one of friends my father had well-known company which was bankrupt because of spending more time on travelling and remain euphoric in personal life, rather than focusing on the company long term goal. Thus, due to quite of jobs and people gave more emphasis in personal joy nation are facing recession, and significantly decline in economy.
To sum up, the issue of whether people should spend more on self-entertainment or should focus on task which is essential for people is complex. Some have suggested that people that people should do favorite things to be happy in life. Nevertheless I still contend that we should give priority on tasks first and should focus on crucial responsibility needed for society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: nowadays
...e people to reduce stress. Thus, people now a days wasting more valuable time due to boost...
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Suggestion: that people
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...complex. Some have suggested that people that people should do favorite things to...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Nevertheless,
...do favorite things to be happy in life. Nevertheless I still contend that we should give pri...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, thus, well, for instance, such as, as a result, in spite of, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1944.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41504178273 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93531995309 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545961002786 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9270818641 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.5 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4375 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.9375 5.45110844103 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267303852072 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0842439629145 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0754144437762 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165762074719 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502738249446 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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