People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things like to do- rather than doing things they should do.
Nowadays most of the people working and doing things they should do. People are spending in busy life style. Personally, I believe that people today have to spend much time on personal enjoyment rather than doing things they should do. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, people should give important place to personal enjoyment. Normally, people do their work nicely and take responsibilities in the working place. But most of the people won’t enjoy their life. They just collecting money and the power. That’s why most people in the under pressure and they get depression. Nowadays people need personal enjoyment doing things like to do. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I am manager in the bank. I have big work load and many responsibilities. So, I am in very pressure environment. Therefore, every end of the moth week end I am going trip with my family or friends. It is very help me to make me relax person.
Secondly, most of the people won’t take responsibilities in their personal life. They done there job always. But they won’t enjoy with their families. Actually, family and happy should be first than working. We should work for live but not for collecting money as greedy. For instance, If some person every weekend go and see their old parents and spend the day with them, they all get enjoy. Also, the person who go, he done their responsibility with the enjoyment.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that we have to spend more time on personal enjoyment rather than doing work should do. This is because personal enjoyment gives relax and enjoy to yourself. It is most important benefit in our life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1441.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 295.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88474576271 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6963539492 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51186440678 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 20.1344086022 55% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.9007874767 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 55.4230769231 100.406767564 55% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.3461538462 20.6045352989 55% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.38461538462 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.476515451309 0.236089414692 202% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130522560478 0.076458572812 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.20367543087 0.0737576698707 276% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.352783851828 0.150856017488 234% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.19029268354 0.0645574589148 295% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.2 11.7677419355 61% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.77 58.1214874552 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.84 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.64 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 86.8835125448 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.0537634409 64% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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