People today spent too much time on personal enjoyment_ doing things they like to do rather than doings things they should do.
Nowadays some people prefer to spend too much time on personal enjoyment and do something they like to do. In my opinion, people have cared about themselves more than the past. They are very enthusiastic about doing something to enjoy over and over. I will illustrate my reasons in the following.
The first reason is that people have discovered more ways to enjoy, and technology helps them to have more enjoyment, and with the advent of something, people have gotten new ways to pleasure. We can look at amusement parks where there are many machines for using and having enjoyable experiences. People go there to have fun. On the other hand, People are willing to have more enjoyable experiences and always try to get new ones. As a matter of fact, mankind has following enjoyment instinctively since the first days of their lives on the earth. For example, people are coming to the cities from the villages instead of the past. According to the reports, one of the important reasons that absorb people to the cities is that being more way to have a fun time and people want to have access to more opportunities for enjoying.
The second reason is about modern life. Modern life is a specific life that has starting from twenty century when people knew with some new aspect of life, and they progressed in technology. So, there are many things to do in this kind of life, and people have to work hard. They spent the amount of energy in their lives. As a result of this lifestyle, they are usually tired. Also, they are trying to have more enjoyment in their routines. My personal experience is an excellent example of this. I used to work until midnight, and I did not have enough time and energy to spend for myself. I was continuing in my life hopelessly. One day, I saw my neighbor that he and his family were preparing to go to a picnic. I tried to remember what the last time I went to the picnic, but I did not. That made me sad. So, I decided to change my routine life and spend more time enjoying it. Therefore, I resigned from my job and applied for a new job with less hardworking. These days I am too enthusiastic and doing everything that I want to do. So, I am enjoying my life now.
In my conclusion, People spending too much time on their enjoyment because of their lifestyle, and they are following a basic rule that it has stimulating them to get more pleasure.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'century' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'centuries'.
Suggestion: centuries
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, kind of, as a matter of fact, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1952.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50808314088 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51564874429 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468822170901 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.5575543532 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.7142857143 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4642857143 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17857142857 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288383739705 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0814642905448 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115449003916 0.0737576698707 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210065339886 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128236792238 0.0645574589148 199% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 11.7677419355 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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