Television advertising directed towards young children aged two to five should not be allowed

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Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.

Nowadays, most people are watching advertising every day. Advertising has some significant impacts on children who are two to five years old. In my opinion, Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. I will illustrate my reasons for this issue.
First, children cannot distinguish between right and wrong, and they believe everything they watch on the TV. On the other hand, it can be harmful and dangerous for children. Basically, Advertisings are full of exaggeration about the size, color, taste, and other qualities of the items, and the children do not understand it. Also, the children try to mimic all things that happened in advertisings. Actually, the children aged two to five have a fantasy view of their environment. For example, my nephew watched an advertisement about a cookie that was eaten a piece of that by a little boy, and he could fly in the sky. That means if children eat it, they will able to fly in the sky. My nephew tried to mimic all things that he had watched in the advertising. He went on the edge of the balcony and wanted to jump and fly. Fortunately, his parents saved him.
Second, Advertising changes some important life's pattern in the children. The pattern of the children's food is altered by advertising, and the threat the children's health. The advertising is trying to show a positive picture of junk foods even though they are offensive to the body. The children do not have enough knowledge about the dangers of junk foods. As a result, the children miss their enthusiasm for the healthy foods made in houses by parents during the time.
Moreover, the children like the sauce that is pouring on the pizza or burger and other things, and it is harmful. They do not know anything about the impact of fat and oil. If the patterns' foods change in the children, it will decrease the level of a healthy society, and it a big threat for subsequent generations. For instance, my friend used to drink soda a lot when he was a child; he liked soda because He had following a famous cartoon character that was playing in advertising for Coca Cola Company. Drinking soda increased the sugar of his body. His weight went up, and he was suffering from many illnesses, and even he might lose his foot because of the high sugar.
In conclusion, Advertising should not be allowed to directed towards children (aged two to five) because of the dangerous impacts on the health's children and create a fake and fantasy picture of children's abilities. Such as fly over the city by eating a cookie!

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 112, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...as some significant impacts on children who are two to five years old. In my opinion, T...
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Line 3, column 283, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... though they are offensive to the body. The children do not have enough knowledge a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, if, moreover, second, so, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2128.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66121984051 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.5205200485 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.8148148148 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5925925926 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.59259259259 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361975350446 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0971414771399 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.165384280651 0.0737576698707 224% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259733135475 0.150856017488 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.18819569523 0.0645574589148 292% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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