People work because they need money to live. What are some other reasons that people work? Discuss one or more of these reasons. Use specific examples and details to support your answer.
In today's generation to make a living there are few important things like house, food, clothes, and family to gain all these the basic necessity is money, money is a important part of a life but we cannot make money as our life as there are various things other than money to sustain in the life.there is a saying that empty mind is a devils work shop. one cannot live without working as well. work is an essential part in a person's life as it makes you independent and confident. it not only helps you to earn but also to serve a purpose in life and to socialize with other people as well.
Firstly, While working we socialize with many people and learn to speak and be confident. we grow confident when we become independent. like when i was a student i used to be a introvert. I was shy around a large group of people. but when i got the job in it, I had to shift my place to work it was out of my comfort zone, From then things slowly started changing, i met a group of people who similarly shifted from their natives for their jobs. we all started guiding each other to keep our pace. Now i frequently interact with the higher authorities in my company.
Secondly, Everyone needs a particular standard of living some wants to drive in Aston Martin's and some are satisfied with Honda few of them want a bungalow to live in some are fine with a two bedroom flat. To attain a particular standard of living one must think and work according to that. it also serves the purpose of life as we have to keep going. without work your mind stops working and you grow lazy. For some their goal must be roam around the world to achieve that people work hard so that they can full fill their dreams and responsibilities. For example, one of my friend always dreamed of buying vintage car's and they are pretty costly. To full fill her dream she made list to achieve that dream.
Lastly, we can say that we work to be happy. we find happiness from the work we do be it a physical exertion or mental work. it helps to satisfy our daily needs and also changes our personality as we keep learning from what we are doing.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, well, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.33082706767 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3447665746 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498746867168 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.1710653744 48.9658058833 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.2857142857 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.5376344086 361% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248220051464 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072484444751 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056738849409 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144557654675 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0528683914716 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.83 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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