A person should never make an important decision alone.
Everyday we make decisions. It can be simples ones like whether driving to work or commute. But also, decisions can be hard ones. Like quit the job of your dreams for the experience to live abroad. We can hope for good consequences of our decisions, but is not a sure thing. I believe that a person should always ask for an opinion when it comes to make an important decision.
From my point of view, different people might have a different perspective about certain issues. Consequently, sharing an opinion with others can help you to make a more assertive decision. For example, I was working in a company about to ask for Bankrupt. Because of this situation, I wanted to get fired to be able to receive my rescission. After one year and half, the Human Resources manager, decided to fired me. But in the same day, a manager from a different area, asked me to stay for more six months to work I his team. After this term, he would fire me as I previously have requested. I accepted his offer. I got home that night and shared my decision with my parents. Their reaction was the opposite of what I expected. They said my decision was wrong, since I would have to put an enormous effort to fulfill the requirements for the new position, yet, no one offered me any raise. Another problem was the actual situation of the company, there’s no guarantee that I would get fired after this work, the company could close its doors before that term. After listening to their point of view, I decide to step back and leave the company.
Secondly, a decision can affect not only the person in charge of it, but also other people lives. Take a decision to move to a different neighborhood without question all the family members, for example, can affect the routine of the entire family. Is this new home far from the school? Is still possible going by foot to work? For instance is necessary to let them aware in order to found out the best decision for everybody.
In conclusion, I believe that better and smarter decision is never made by only one person. Sharing your issue with another person brings a different point of view based n past experiences. In addition, debating the pros and cons might help get a more assertive resolution.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[1]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective, and the comma is missing. Did you mean 'every day, we'?
Suggestion: Every day, we
Everyday we make decisions. It can be simples ones ...
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Line 1, column 47, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ay we make decisions. It can be simples ones like whether driving to work or commut...
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Line 1, column 51, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e make decisions. It can be simples ones like whether driving to work or commute....
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Line 3, column 75, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eople might have a different perspective about certain issues. Consequently, shar...
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Line 7, column 173, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experiences'.
Suggestion: experiences
...rings a different point of view based n past experiences. In addition, debating the pros and con...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, second, secondly, so, still, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1846.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60349127182 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55250521354 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551122194514 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.895061212 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.3703703704 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8518518519 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11111111111 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1889002076 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0466700526312 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0814282902389 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127053890921 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0589595160468 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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