Playing games together is a good way to build closer relationships.
It is critically important that we have a good relationship with other people. Personally, I believe that playing games with others can improve our relationship with them. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explain in this following essay.
To begin with, humans are social creatures that is important for them to have relationship with other people. An introvert person feel that it is very hard to be friend with other, they feel shy and afraid even to initiate a conversation with others. A way for people to build relationship is to have a same interest. My personal experience is a compelling illustration for this. In my high school, I was a very introvert person. I did not have a friend and spent most of my time playing games. One day, I was watching people streaming games and suddenly one of my classmate caught glimpse of my video. We began to talk about the games because he actually loved to play that same games. We immediately became friend and always played games together in the weekend. Our relationship become so strong that even now we still play games together.
Furthermore, I think that playing games also can benefit our career. Boss and employees usually have their distance because boss have to be respected by employees. Sometimes its hard for those 2 sides to become get close. Games can be a great ice breaker to start a conversation with boss. Most of company have their team building exercise that can help this problem. For instance, around 3 years ago, I started working in this company. My boss really a strict guy and I was really scared of him. Around 1 month after I worked there, the HR department held teambuilding exercise that followed by all the employees. We play games such as drawing relay, popping balloon, and other games together. That was the time that I realize that my boss is actually a great fun person. My relation with him improve exponentially over night.
In conclusion, I strongly believes that relationship can be built over games. This is because games can be a foundation of making friends and playing games together can be an ice breaker for conversation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 200, Rule ID: I_AFRAID[9]
Message: The adjective afraid is used with 'to': 'afraid to even'.
Suggestion: afraid to even
...be friend with other, they feel shy and afraid even to initiate a conversation with others....
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Line 7, column 27, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'believe'
Suggestion: believe
...ver night. In conclusion, I strongly believes that relationship can be built over gam...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, furthermore, really, so, still, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1769.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78108108108 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72308664507 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502702702703 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.2900792537 48.9658058833 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.0384615385 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2307692308 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.46153846154 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258035609191 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739170025922 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0768813378862 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174004353331 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450420763928 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.85 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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