Question:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answe
Some people argue that following the same profession resemble to parents is good. They cite that usually people will call to those children who follow their parents job as nepotism, they will be unnecessary comparison to parents, the children cannot do in their own so become less responsible. However, I strongly disagree with these people and believe that choosing same job as parents is far more better than selecting diverse profession for following two reasons.
To commence, children who show affection towards the parents career can explore in real world more conveniently and easily than to choose distinct job. To illustrate my own experience, as my father is instructor of government school, and everybody praise him, then I also follow same career. Despite the harsh schedule and rules of school, it becomes so easier for me to deal it. In fact, I was already familiar to these rules, since my father already gives me red signal about these stuff. So, I can deal with any issues in my life. It is important to exposure in real world because without facing the issues happening in mundane life one could not be responsible person and cannot able to deal with issues in professional life. Thus, the choosing the career twinning as parents becomes easier to stand in real world.
Furthermore, devotion the career similar as parents helps to enhance skills profusely and become more skilled than parents. For instance, the son/daughter of pilot would be more skilled than their parents, as they already familiar with the duty of their parents, and they could learn not only various unique techniques, but also modified the techniques used by the parents while flying above the sky. Moreover, carpenters sons could be derivate the techniques of their parents and could refined it more smoothly by proliferate skills. It is crucial to widen the skills and pivotal to be more skilled than parents because it helps to compete in his competitive world more efficiently and accurately. Therefore, the path which followed by parents helps to widen copious amount of skills.
Nevertheless, the issue of whether children should accelerate towards the career followed by parents is complex. Some suggested that choosing alike profession as parents decreases our ability and become less responsible person. Nevertheless, I still contend that choosing same career as parent helps to enhance our skill and it becomes relaxing to face the real world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 395, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...hat choosing same job as parents is far more better than selecting diverse profession for f...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 488, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'refine'
Suggestion: refine
...e techniques of their parents and could refined it more smoothly by proliferate skills....
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, then, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2054.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14786967419 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62313958857 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491228070175 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7102709905 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.111111111 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1666666667 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281171349901 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907238483683 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747631536867 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179757277889 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.085443792077 0.0645574589148 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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