Question :Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
We, as a society, live in an era that the internet plays a vital role in it, and without the internet connection, virtually everything will shut down. I, therefore, completely agree that government should put more attention and focus on the internet rather than transportation. I feel this way because the internet is the heart of communication and connected our world globally. This connection brings us so many benefits that I will elaborate on in the following paragraphs.
The first and foremost reason why I think money should go into the internet is that it fastens our access to information. A few decades ago, if you want to find a fact, learn some material, or even become aware of the latest news, you had no choice but to go to local stores to buy newspapers or for learning, you had to sign up for an offline course. But with the advancement of technology, you can not only obtain all of these materials with a single click but also you can attain those with almost no money. Hence, the internet should be the government's main focus to be invested in.
The second ubiquitous reason why I feel the internet should get more attention is that because of the communication we have now, we are able to connect remotely and do our work. For instance, we can work remotely from our homes which gives us a huge advantage to be more flexible in our working hours. In addition, you can buy all the necessary things online giving you more time to spend on other important things. I personally did more than 80 percent of my job remotely without even going out last month and this helped to successfully manage my time.
To summarize, In my personal point of view, the internet should be more focused in the future because not only it increases the availability of information but it also fastens our communication and saves a tremendous amount of people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 558, Rule ID: MAIN_FOCUS[1]
Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
... the internet should be the governments main focus to be invested in. The second ubiqui...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1537.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68597560976 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7445510751 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567073170732 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.2927397275 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.230769231 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2307692308 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23076923077 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202134657954 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717344082775 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391939753289 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11092296292 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464953390255 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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