Question :Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records.Which approach do you prefer, and why?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With the expansion of technology and the rise of the internet, people now can communicate with each other in a more efficient way through social media and other sites. While many people think that it is not appropriate to share your information and pictures on these social apps, I strongly believe that sharing these stuff can bring many advantages. I will elaborate on why I think this way in the following paragraphs.
The most important and foremost reason that people should share their information is that it helps people to acquire knowledge and become more aware of the environment and place where they live in. Today, if you want to learn anything, you can achieve your goal just with a few simple clicks. For instance, youtube is a video-sharing channel where people can share their information, ideas, and belief with all people who live around the world. In addition, It's completely free and really easy to use. if people didn't have access to these kinds of sites, they had to pay lots of money to obtain the same knowledge.
The second obvious and ubiquitous reason why sharing experiences and pictures can be beneficial is that it connects more people around the globe. In social media, when someone shares a picture, everyone can comment on him/her post and it can be a start of making friends. Moreover, you can see many people that have the same experience and interests as yours. as a result, you can find people more easily than before. To share my own experience, when I was in my 20s, I find a friend through Instagram which is a photo and video-sharing social networking app and we are all still friends with each other. therefore, these sharing photos and activities connect people more easily.
In a nutshell, I definitely feel that people should upload and share their information, pictures, and even videos with others. First, it helps people become more knowledgeable. Second, it closes people to each other and increases the connection.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, really, second, so, still, therefore, while, for instance, i think, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91616766467 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63595507744 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532934131737 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3918549582 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5882352941 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6470588235 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64705882353 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223978984427 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0810539369516 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0382861236093 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153289396579 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0101143433324 0.0645574589148 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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