Question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples
Through travelling, people not only refresh themselves but also able to secure advantage for them. However, some people prefer to go for domestic travel and other prefer a international travel. If I have to choose between domestic and abroad travel for its benficiality, I will prefer an abroad trip because of the some reasons which I will explore in the subsequent paragraphs.
First, an international travel can give an business idea for an individual from which he/she can make a fortune of money. In foreign country, there is a lot of products and technology which can be feasible to operate in the homeland but still not existed in here. Therefore, on visiting a abroad, they might get exposed to this novel idea at the first place and its later introduction may can create a huge market in their own country. To illustate this, KFC franchise has been dominated a whole world because of its tasty food and timely delivery to the customer. However, born of this idea was orignially from the USA. Later, it's branch was lauched in the many country and now it become one of the dominant fast food company in the world. Because of this idea, many people who introduce it in their country earned a million of dollar. Had people been not travelled a lot, they would have been oblivion with this food and never ever to gain a money that they have now.
Second, a foreign visit also helpful to implement a healthy habit in our life. For instance, when I visited a japan first time, I was shocked to see them to eat a lot boiled and less spicy food item. After reading a few article about the high life expectancy, I found one of the reason behind it was healthy food habit. This made me contemplate how much unhealthy food I used to consume. Eventhough I was unable to replicate the same dish in my daily food plan, at least, I changed my habit of eating oily food rapaciously.
To wrap up, I reiterate that having a foreign experience far more effective in positive way than domestic travel as it gives a break though idea for your economic upliftment and impart the positive change in our habit.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 171, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...go for domestic travel and other prefer a international travel. If I have to choo...
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Line 1, column 171, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'international travel'.
Suggestion: international travel
...go for domestic travel and other prefer a international travel. If I have to choose between domestic a...
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Line 1, column 316, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...ll prefer an abroad trip because of the some reasons which I will explore in the sub...
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Line 3, column 41, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...First, an international travel can give an business idea for an individual from wh...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...existed in here. Therefore, on visiting a abroad, they might get exposed to this ...
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Line 3, column 683, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'becomes'?
Suggestion: becomes
... lauched in the many country and now it become one of the dominant fast food company i...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'money'.
Suggestion: money
...n with this food and never ever to gain a money that they have now. Second, a forei...
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Line 5, column 217, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun article seems to be countable; consider using: 'few articles'.
Suggestion: few articles
...d less spicy food item. After reading a few article about the high life expectancy, I found...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, therefore, at least, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1730.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6256684492 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52697987128 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577540106952 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.357914288 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.764705882 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17647058824 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145550670468 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0441699798185 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.031785786785 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0819910409844 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0332279185203 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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