Question :Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment—doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
How spending time is a controversial topic for a long time. While the experts highlight that individuals should spend a lot of time on personal enjoyment, the vast majority of society believes that people should spend less time on enjoyment and should do essential useful thing such as working. In what follows, I will pinpoint the two primary rationales to elaborate on my viewpoint.
The first reason to champion this standpoint is that doing leisure activities can increase your productivity. To be more specific, you can get rid of your hectic life by doing exercise or playing your favorite games in which you can release your anger. My personal life experience is a compelling reason for this claim. when I was a freshman in university, I had a fully arranged curriculum. That semester program made me always feel bored and tired. In order to cope with the situation, I made a decision to go regularly out with my friend especially at the weekends. Each weekend we grouped up and went to the cinema, theater, and concert. These enjoyable activities boosted my brainpower and helped me to get higher scores in the university's final exams.
Moreover, although some important things such as working or studying are essential to our life, experts state that by doing recreational activities you will be happier. According to an investigative report, doing workout regularly every day, especially in the morning, can reduce the risk of fatal diseases such as cancer or cardiovascular diseases. It also can reduce the stress hormone, cortisol, in your body, consequently, you are able to concentrate on your tasks and assignments, whether you are a employee or student, and your productivity will increase. In this situation you can solve your problems and achieve your goals. For instance, my ground father is retarded by an oil company. He used to exercise every day by going to spot clubs. By doing these activity he was always creative in his work and got raise by the company.
Based on what discussed we can safely conclude that by doing personal enjoyment such as recreational activity or going out with your friends, not only you are able to cope the hard situations and achieve your goals, but also you will be healthier and happier than other members of society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, so, while, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1902.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97905759162 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8101969264 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560209424084 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.5221517684 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.105263158 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1052631579 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.10526315789 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280635942169 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0748999115023 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748242538303 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182994980772 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0318509113821 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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