Question :Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Children are not only the human capital of a country but also the most important base of a family, and their success is so vital for society and the family. All parents are responsible to foster a child that has a healthy mind and body. In this regard, some people are of the opinion that parents should spend their free time improving their children's educational abilities, while others believe that parents should spend their free time with their children only playing and having fun. I agree with the second idea rather than the first one for two reasons that will be presented here.
First, playing is one of the most important parts of children's development and evolution., and children can learn many things from playing. This approach has a significant influence on the power of learning and cognition. By means of playing, we can teach their class concepts so easily, and we can use modern technology to reach our goals. For instance, by searching on the Internet, we are able to find a great number of websites and videos that help us reach new ways of teaching that are combined with playing. By doing so, we have an opportunity to spend our free time with our children and help them in their educational process.
Second, school is the best place for learning. Thanks to our new civilization, we have state-of-the-art schools all around the world, and it has bought about that being a teacher is need of plenty of experience and requirements. Therefore, we have well-skilled teachers at schools. They by considering a great number of psychological and educational aspects do their duties in the best manner. By contrast, although today's parents are more educated than at any time in the past, they do not have teaching ability. As a result, it is better for parents only concentrate their time on children's emotional factors rather than education.
In conclusion, all of the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that parents should spend their free time only playing and having fun with their children because of two reasons the first one is that by means of playing they can teach their children many educational concepts. Second, parents do not have sufficient ability to teach their children since teaching is a professional career and needs a good deal of pieces of training and experience.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 16, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... rather than education. In conclusion, all of the aforementioned reasons lead us to the c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1930.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91094147583 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72594506589 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480916030534 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 570.6 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.7387620582 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.529411765 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1176470588 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76470588235 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.347453131884 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10244888402 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0953518509515 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220381205408 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445889068798 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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