To remain happy and optimistic when you fail is more important than achieving success.
As a human being, our life is full of both failures and successes in different aspects as follows: educational, professional, personal, social aspect and so forth. Even though many people are in the opinion that it is more important to achieve success in comparison to keep happiness and remain optimistic; but, I, personally, subscribe to this idea that the ability to be happy and hopeful during the failure time in our lives. People gain valuable achievement and see success only if they can handle the failure time positively and energetically. It stands to reason that to achieve success people need to get some experiences through their failure, as an Iranian proverb says that failure is prerequisite for achieving success.
In first place, these days, it is a common happen for everyone to be beaten down by life. All of us encounter with much condition in which we were feeling a failure is coming. Some individuals in such a situation get pessimistic and cannot deal with their stress, hopeless and also their desire to win. These characteristics in them, getting upset soon, prepare a permanent setback in their lives because they have not the predominant need of being success, hopeful and upbeat, by which individuals get energy to try more and more. For example, I used to be a person who thought the success must obtain without experience any failure. I expected to see achievement of my activities as soon as possible. I didn’t learn to be strong and accept the failure during the game of life; but, after years I understood that failing is one part of achieving to success and the vital key to be a successful person in general are happiness and positive thought even when we fail. It was a turning point in my life because after the altering in my view in this matter, not only I live more calm; but also I gain success in some condition which failure is more likely to happen than success.
Secondly, there are many skills which obtain just by encountering with failures. Psychologically speaking, people know about their weakness and lacks by being in some failure situations and it is necessary for them to be able to remain happy, energetic, positive during the failures. Most of the people draw wrong pictures of themselves in their minds because they don’t have enough knowledge about their characteristics, abilities and weakness. If we want to do a task which we don’t experience before and even we don’t do any similar one, we would need to get some knowledges. During the first times of doing any new thing, failure is more probable than success because we haven’t gained adequate experiences to hold a true way to see success. In addition, we don’t measure our abilities and skills in such a field in which there are some scares in our personality than need to get powered by passing time and use the valuable achievements of our previous failures.
In summary, by taking all of these into account, I think the outcomes and achievements of failures are very valuable inasmuch as they are more important and productive than achieving success. People can improve their personality and enhance their perspective through encountering and managing their failing. It is also crystal clear that the success happen only the initial failures.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, for example, i think, in addition, in general, in summary, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2749.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 553.0 407.700716846 136% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97106690778 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84932490483 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82285373621 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470162748644 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 882.9 618.680645161 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.0576100583 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.904761905 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3333333333 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38095238095 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248200499789 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759298962812 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0805622887837 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171989848812 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0581590421372 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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