The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict

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The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.

Speaking of the rules for the youngsters to follow, someone believe that it is too strict for them to release their individuality. However, I think that the rules are not only reasonable, but also beneficial for young people since they can help them to control themselves and protect them from hurting themselves.

First of all, those rules can help the youngsters to control themselves. Since the young people are not mature enough to control themselves, rules that are designed for them are preventing them from making stupid mistakes. Take the rules in my school for example. At first, there was no rule to restrict the use of cellphone at class. When we were taking a class, my friend Jack who sat beside me just couldn't hold himself from using it to watch some interesting videos or playing games, which really distracted him from the class and the points made by the teacher. In that case, he had a great degradation on his grades. However, after the prohibition of taking cellphones into classrooms were published, he had no distraction from the class and had more attention on what the teacher is saying, in which case his grade was greatly improved. So rules can really help the youngsters to control themselves.

Secondly, rules can protect them from hurting themselves. It is widely acknowledge that alcohol is harmful to young people's physical health. It is detrimental for people to drink it at a young age, since it would cause an extreme addiction to it and a long-lasting harm to liver. For example, my uncle had drunk too much alcohol when he was young since the ban for youngsters to buy alcohol was not strictly carried out. So every week he went out with his friends and drunk too much wine, which cause a damage to his liver. As for now he had a liver disease which brings him a lot of pain, which could have been avoided if the rules were strictly carried out.

Although the rule of wearing school uniforms seems strict for students. However, it is designed under the consideration of possibility of the situation that many students from different family conditions will have a bad habit of comparing with each other on wearing, which will distract them from their study and therefore have a bad influence on their grades. So even this uniform rule is reasonable for youngsters.

Taking what has been discussed above into consideration, rules that societies expect young people to follow today are not stringent. On the contrary, it helps young people in a lot of aspects.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 61, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'believes'.
Suggestion: believes
...s for the youngsters to follow, someone believe that it is too strict for them to relea...
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Line 3, column 403, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
..., my friend Jack who sat beside me just couldnt hold himself from using it to watch som...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 72, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'acknowledged'.
Suggestion: acknowledged
...m from hurting themselves. It is widely acknowledge that alcohol is harmful to young people...
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Line 5, column 502, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'damage'.
Suggestion: damage
...ds and drunk too much wine, which cause a damage to his liver. As for now he had a liver...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, as for, for example, i think, speaking of, first of all, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2077.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83023255814 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60526259435 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502325581395 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.8934754993 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9047619048 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4761904762 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258070848154 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893678831326 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0873477006899 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183814994107 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124961108046 0.0645574589148 194% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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